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the government does not have the answer to this argument

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Have you ever had the feeling when your problem could not solve? So many people always think that the government does not have the answer to this argument. However, the number of problems in our life is increasing. The big question is, who is essentially responsible for resolving these issues for citizens. Many problems occur in one's person space. So the government can not control all their problems. But they can do everything as they could. Because the role of the state help people to find the keys from many issues. They detect new ways to guide our country effectively and build more infrastructure systems. Besides, the state plays a crucial role to develop our country more successful and affluent. Furthermore, every day, there are many numerous of issues that need to find the ways to give the answer for people. Moreover, their response is to receive, consider and solve this information. However the state agencies are not solving their reports. For instance, recently, the covid19 pandemic is increasing dramatically. As a result, many hospitals are not allowed patients to go into. Not receive patients. Because the infrastructure of the hospital has been exceeded. They do not have enough room to accept patients. And encouraging citizens to cure by themselves. So citizens write many complaints to the president to solve this issue. After many times, they constantly sent, finally, the state focuses to resolve this problem. Moreover, some people live near TO LICH river, they are trying to send their comments about citizens to throw garbage into the river. But no replication for this argument. People are very angry and anxious because the smell of the river becomes polluted that may be affected to their health. In conclusion, I believe that some complaints do not accept because there are many other important issues to deal with. But the state will handle all problems because they change the policy reform to support citizens as possible.
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always
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think
that the
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government
does not have the answer to this argument.
However
, the number of
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problems
in our life is increasing. The
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big
question is, who is
essentially
responsible for resolving these
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issues
for citizens.

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problems
occur in one's person space.
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So
the
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government
can not control all their
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problems
.
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they can do everything as they could.
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Because
the role of the
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state
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help
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people
to find the keys from
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many
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issues
. They detect new ways to guide our country
effectively
and build more infrastructure systems.
Besides
, the
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state
plays a crucial role to develop our country more successful and affluent.

Furthermore
, every day, there are
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many
numerous of
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issues
that need to find the ways to give the answer for
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people
.
Moreover
, their response is to receive, consider and solve this information.
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However
the
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state
agencies are not solving their reports.
For instance
, recently, the
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covid19
pandemic is increasing
dramatically
.
As a result
,
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many
hospitals are not
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allowed
patients to go into. Not receive patients.
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Because
the infrastructure of the hospital has
been exceeded
. They do not have
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enough
room to accept patients. And encouraging
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citizens
to cure by themselves.
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So
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citizens
write
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many
complaints to the president to solve this
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issue
. After
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many
times, they
constantly
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sent
,
finally
, the
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state
focuses to resolve this
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problem
.
Moreover
,
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some
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people
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live
near TO
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LICH
river, they are trying to
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send
their comments about
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citizens
to throw garbage into the river.
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But
no replication for this argument.
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People
are
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very
angry and anxious
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because
the smell of the river becomes polluted that may be
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affected
to their health.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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complaints do not accept
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because
there are
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many
other
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important
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issues
to deal with.
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But
the
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state
will handle all
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problems
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because
they
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change
the policy reform to support
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citizens
as possible.
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IELTS essay the government does not have the answer to this argument

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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