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The given chart illustrates the proportion of citizens who purchase and drink coffee and tea in five different Australian cities in the previous 4 weeks.

The given chart illustrates the proportion of citizens who purchase and drink coffee and tea in five different Australian cities in the previous 4 weeks. 9lerr
The given chart illustrates the proportion of citizens who purchase and drink coffee and tea in five different Australian cities in the previous 4 weeks. It is crystal clear that Australians were into using these beverages in some cafes instead of purchasing them and the citizens in Hobart city were the most regular customers of cafe shops. The percentage of people who bought fresh coffee in Sydney and Melbourne were equal, at over 40% while Hobart ranked third with about 38% of citizens buying the same product. In addition, the figures of Brisban and Adelaide were equal as well, at nearly 35% respectively. In terms of the percentage of people who purchased instant coffee, Bristan and Hobart ranked first with about roughly 54% while the figures of three remaining cities fluctuated from about 45% to 50%. According to the percentage of people using coffee or tea in cafe shops, citizens of Melbourne and Hobart are the most regular customers of these shops. Besides, there was over 60% of Sydney’s citizens drinking these beverages in cafe shops while the rate of people using coffee and tea in stores of two Brisban and Adelaide were 55% and 40%.
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in Hobart city were the most regular customers of
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The percentage of
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in Sydney and Melbourne were equal, at over 40% while Hobart ranked third with about 38% of
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with about roughly 54% while the figures of three remaining cities fluctuated from about 45% to 50%.

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shops,
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of Melbourne and Hobart are the most regular customers of these shops.
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drinking these beverages in
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shops while the rate of
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IELTS essay The given chart illustrates the proportion of citizens who purchase and drink coffee and tea in five different Australian cities in the previous 4 weeks.

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