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The reading and the lecture both are about the future impact of aquamarine agriculture. The author of the article states that if it is done in large scale, the unsustainable practises will increase in ocean and will lead to destroying the living creatures of ocean. However, the professor refutes all the claims made by author. He believes there will not be major impact and the living creatures will not be extinct due to aquamarine agriculture. The first point the author states is that, in order to exactly located the minerals and resources, many of the ocean areas will be tore apart and the creatures will be devasted. On contrary, the professor says that, scientist can locate the gold or copper mines in ocean by digging into small area and hence there will not be much damage into the life of creatures in ocean territory. Secondly, the author’s position is that, where ever the digging happens, the poison from the ocean bed will be dig up and circulated almost 1000 miles in ocean, and will devast creatures there. But professor claims, that the circulation will spread not more 100 miles and it will not matter much. Lastly, author states, this will also affect the quality of fish and sea food as most of them will carry poison. Rebutting this claim, professor posits that, aquamarine agriculture mostly targeted to be carrying in dessert like areas, and hence no fishes that humans consume will not be affected and hence there will merely be any sea food quality degradation due to mining
The reading and the lecture both are about the future impact of aquamarine agriculture. The
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author
of the article states that if it
is done
in large scale, the unsustainable
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practises
will increase in
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ocean
and will lead to destroying the living
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creatures
of
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ocean
.
However
, the
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professor
refutes all the claims made by
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author
. He believes there will not be major impact and the living
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creatures
will not be extinct due to aquamarine agriculture.

The
first
point the
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author
states is that, in order to exactly located the minerals and resources,
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many
of the
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ocean
areas will be
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tore
apart and the
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creatures
will be
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devasted
. On contrary, the
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professor
says that, scientist can locate the gold or copper mines in
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ocean
by digging into
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small
area and
hence
there will not be much damage into the life of
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creatures
in
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ocean
territory.

Secondly
, the
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author’s
position is that, where ever the digging happens, the poison from the
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ocean
bed will be dig up and circulated almost
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1000 miles
in
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ocean
, and will
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devast
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creatures
there.
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But
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professor
claims, that the circulation will spread not more
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100 miles
and it will not matter much.

Lastly
,
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author
states, this will
also
affect the quality of fish and sea food as most of them will carry poison. Rebutting this claim,
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professor
posits that, aquamarine agriculture
mostly
targeted to be carrying in dessert like areas, and
hence
no fishes that humans consume will not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
and
hence
there will
merely
be any sea food quality degradation due to
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mining
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IELTS essay the future impact of aquamarine agriculture

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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