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The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station."Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the comp

The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station. " Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the comp m18nn
The author's claim in the memorandum is that if the weather and local news program returned to the same time as it was previously, local businesses will return the contract which they had before. Moreover, there are some carpings about local news program regarding the national news program. If it is for the author to have a strong base in those assumptions, he should provide more proves for each of them. First of all, it is stated that viewers complaint about weather and local news, however the author fails to prove the stated assumption. As it happened in period of one year, viewers may have changed their preferences for watching national news instead of local news. For example, those viewers who at first composed only by adults, now it may composed by merely teenagers who do not care about weather of watching local news. Furthermore, the cancelation contracts may have happened due to the fact that there are no more people watching programs, thus local businesses are not having audience and not making any profits at all. Moreover, stating that restoring the time devoted to weather and local news may not necessarily work again because as it was said previously the audience may have changed and then, those programs are unlikely to become successful again. Finally, if the author wants to strenght his argument, he should have provided enough evidences which would support and be the basement for the argument at all.
The author's claim in the memorandum is that if the
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weather
and
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local
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news
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program
returned to the same time as it was previously,
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local
businesses will return the contract which they had
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before
.
Moreover
, there are
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some
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carpings
about
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local
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news
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program
regarding the national
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news
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program
. If it is for the author to have a strong base in those assumptions, he should provide more proves for each of them.

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, it
is stated
that
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viewers
complaint about
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weather
and
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local
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news
,
however
the author fails to prove the stated assumption. As it happened in period of one year, viewers may have
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changed
their preferences for watching national
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news
instead
of
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local
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news
.
For example
, those viewers who at
first
composed
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only
by adults,
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now
it may
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composed
by
merely
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teenagers
who do not care about
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weather
of watching
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local
news.

Furthermore
, the
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cancelation
contracts may have happened due to the fact that there are no more
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people
watching
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programs
,
thus
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local
businesses are not having audience and not making any profits at all.

Moreover
, stating that restoring the time devoted to
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weather
and
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local
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news
may not
necessarily
work again
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because
as it
was said
previously the audience may have
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changed
and then, those
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programs
are unlikely to become successful again.

Finally
, if the author wants to
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strenght
his argument, he should have provided
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enough
evidences which would support and be the basement for the argument at all.
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IELTS essay The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station. " Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the comp

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5 paragraphs
242 words
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