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The flowchart demonstrates the entire process of producing canned fruit under modern manufacturing conditions.

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The flowchart demonstrates the entire process of producing canned fruit under modern manufacturing conditions. In general, it can be seen that the process of canning fruit is a sophisticated process involving many stages. Most steps in the process are done by machine, except the picking and quality control are done by hand. First, the fruit is harvested by farmers when it is ripe and then transported to the factory in the large lorries. At the factory, they washed and checked the quality of the fruit under a magnified view. Also, any poor and bad food is rejected. After that, the only high-quality fruit is stored in cold storage to ensure freshness. When it is ready for canning, after being weighted and graded, the fruit is peeled and sliced into two parts to remove the cores or seeds. In the next step, these sliced fruits are put into cans and sealed before being cooked overheat to sterilize. Then, the cans are labelled and stored in the warehouse. Finally, it is despatched and ready to transport to the supermarkets for sale.
The flowchart demonstrates the entire
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process
of producing canned
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fruit
under modern manufacturing conditions.

In general
, it can be
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seen
that the
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process
of canning
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fruit
is a sophisticated
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process
involving
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many
stages. Most steps in the
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process
are done
by machine, except the picking and quality control
are done
by hand.

First
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fruit
is harvested
by farmers when it is ripe and then transported to the factory in the large lorries. At the factory, they washed and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
the quality of the
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fruit
under a magnified view.
Also
, any poor and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
food
is rejected
. After that, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
high-quality
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fruit
is stored
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
storage to ensure freshness. When it is ready for canning, after
being weighted
and graded, the
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fruit
is peeled
and sliced into two parts to remove the cores or seeds. In the
next
step, these sliced
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fruits
are put
into cans and sealed
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before
being cooked
overheat to sterilize. Then, the cans
are labelled
and stored in the warehouse.
Finally
, it
is despatched
and ready to transport to the supermarkets for sale.
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IELTS essay The flowchart demonstrates the entire process of producing canned fruit under modern manufacturing conditions.

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