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describes an animal that is in danger

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The Javan rhinoceros is the most endangered of the five rhino species in the world. The number of individuals extant today ranges from 40 to 60, living in Indonesia. The decline of this species is attributed to habitat loss and massive poaching for horns because in some countries, especially Asian ones, it's believed that rhino horns are able to treat chronic diseases such as cancer. That's why more and more people are willing to spend a lot of money buying rhino horns or powder from their horns. To address this atrocity, they introduced a rhino protection law and increased fines for illegal trade, propaganda to protect animals, put java rhinos in national park, set up rhino protection campaigns, Lastly, to protect rhinos we need to improve people's awareness and knowledge

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 ranges from 40 to 60, living in Indonesia. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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To address this atrocity, they introduced a rhino protection law and increased fines for illegal trade, propaganda to protect animals, put java rhinos in national park, set up rhino protection campaigns, Lastly
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improve
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