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it is impossible for government to help on needy people of the world. some people think that government should only focus on their own country. to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Helping others is indispensable part of human's character even from anciet time. The number of needy people in entire world is very vast and it is impossible for any government to help all of them. Therefore, it is considered by several individuals that authorities should focus on their own citizens. I completely agree with the former statement. The viewpoints behind this consensus will be explicated in this essay. There are numerous factors which support to say that authorities ought to focus on their own nation. The first and foremost is that majority of countries are developing countries and their economic position is not too strong to accomplish the requirements of their residents. In these nations citizens face numerous issues such as unemployment, poverty and lack of food and resources. Therefore, government out to give main preference to solve out these problems of their country residents instead of helping others. This type of countries are not able to assist overseas help seeking persons as their economy is not strong and their home residents are suffering from the number of issues. To exemplify, India is a developing nation, this country's GDP rate is very low and nearly 70% of legible people are unemployed. So in this type of areas, supreme authorities should give their maximum efforts to deal with this dilemmas instead of helping other countries. Movingfurther, due to this practice, economic growth of particular country may suffer. In brief, if government assist other part of world then it require the gigantic amount of finance. However, this money can be utilised in home country in various developing fields such as infrastructure, medical and so on. Apart from this, residents pay taxes to authority for social works. It is liability of government to provide assistance to needy individuals as they prepaid for their help. For instance, in Pakistan average 40% of total income of family is paid to government in the form of taxes and according to social responsibilities it is owner of authority to repay public tax in the form of welfare and community work. As a consequence, one nation should allocate assistance to the citizens by their own rather than hoping for help from other world. In conclusion, there are gigantic range of factors which show that law enforcement agencies ought to mainly concentrate to provide aid to home residents as in every nation there are plethora of people who need help and it is also a responsibility of government to help individuals of their country.
Helping others is indispensable part of human's character even from
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time. The number of needy
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people
in entire world is
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very
vast and it is impossible for any
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government
to
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help
all of them.
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, it
is considered
by several individuals that
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authorities
should focus on their
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own
citizens. I completely
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agree
with the former statement. The viewpoints behind this consensus will
be explicated
in this essay.

There are numerous factors which support to say that
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authorities
ought to focus on their
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own
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nation
. The
first
and foremost is that majority of
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countries
are developing
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countries
and their economic position is not too strong to accomplish the requirements of their
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residents
. In these
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nations
citizens face numerous issues such as unemployment, poverty and lack of food and resources.
Therefore
,
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government
out to give main preference to solve out these problems of their
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country
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residents
instead
of helping others. This type of
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countries
are not able to assist overseas
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help
The verb 'help' is used with an infinitive: "to seek" or "seek".
seeking
persons as their economy is not strong and their home
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residents
are suffering from the number of issues. To exemplify, India is a developing
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nation
, this country's GDP rate is
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very
low and
nearly
70% of legible
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people
are unemployed
.
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So
in this type of areas, supreme
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authorities
should give their maximum efforts to deal with
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this
dilemmas
instead
of helping
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other
countries.

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Movingfurther
, due to this practice, economic growth of particular
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country
may suffer.
In brief
, if
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government
assist
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other
part of world then it
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require
the gigantic amount of finance.
However
, this money can be
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utilised
in home
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country
in various developing fields such as infrastructure, medical and
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so
on. Apart from this,
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residents
pay taxes to
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authority
for social works. It is liability of
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government
to provide assistance to needy individuals as they prepaid for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
.
For instance
, in Pakistan average 40% of total income of family
is paid
to
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government
in the form of taxes and according to social responsibilities it is owner of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
authority
to repay public tax in the form of welfare and community work. As a consequence, one
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nation
should allocate assistance to the citizens by their
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own
rather
than hoping for
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help
from
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other
world.

In conclusion
, there are gigantic range of factors which
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show
that law enforcement agencies ought to
mainly
concentrate to provide aid to home
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residents
as in every
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nation
there are plethora of
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people
who need
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help
and it is
also
a responsibility of
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government
to
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help
individuals of their
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country
.
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IELTS essay it is impossible for government to help on needy people of the world. some people think that government should only focus on their own country.

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