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In order to help small businesses thrive, government should play a minimal role in private business matters

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The businesses present in any particular region form a major part of the ecosystem (for the lack of a better word) of that region and hence their contribution to the development of that region and the people in it is crucial. Not only do businesses create jobs in a region, but they also facilitate trade and by extension exchange and enrichment of goods, knowledge and the culture in general between the regions involved. Barring a few rare exceptions most new businesses start out small and some of them then go on to becoming "large" scale businesses gradually over the span of years. Not all businesses survive let alone become large or medium scaled businesses. Most of the times the decision is made by the Open Market as a whole depending on a lot a factors like say the demand for the product that the business is selling, its effectiveness/quality, etc. which are largly decided by the customers of that business and therefore the success of a business depends, to a great extent, on it's customers, which is only fair. This is more relevant/applicable/true for small business then it is for large well-established ones which tend to have more variety in their products for their different customers. Now, there are other factors which also affect where or not a small business does well or not like natural disasters, or some unforeseen circumstance beyond their control. These factors, as unfortunate as they may be, theres nothing much that can be done regarding them besides having a few fail-safes. Apart from these, there is another major factor viz. the government and their policies which is, to a large extent, beyond the control of the business and it's customers and which has a huge impact on the way the business operates and by extension the revenue it generates and it's growth in general. Stance: Mostly agree. Points: 1. Less government influence means faster decision making, smother operation, quick implementation of new policies, etc. since its a small business. 2. More room for change and experimentation and therefore more potential to grow. 3. Faciliates an environment which is more conducive to a mode of operation which is honest and fair as there would be less number of unnecessary stringent government policies that the business may seek to circumvent by potentially illegal means. Conclusion: A minimal government influence is fine but anything more than that is just unnecessary for small scale businesses and would only serve as an obstacle or a deterrant to the business' success.
The
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businesses
present in any particular
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region
form a major part of the ecosystem (for the lack of a better word) of that
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region
and
hence
their contribution to the development of that
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region
and the
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people
in it is crucial. Not
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only
do
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businesses
create jobs in a
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region
,
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but
they
also
facilitate trade and by extension exchange and enrichment of
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goods
, knowledge and the culture
in general
between the
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regions
involved.

Barring a few rare exceptions most new
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businesses
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start
out
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small
and
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some
of them then go on to becoming
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large
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scale
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businesses
gradually
over the span of years. Not all
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businesses
survive
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let
alone become
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large
or medium scaled
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businesses
.
Consider using "most of the time" if you mean "usually" or "very often".
Most of the times
the decision
is made
by the Open Market as a whole depending on a lot a
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factors
like say the demand for the product that the
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business
is selling, its effectiveness/quality, etc. which are
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largly
decided by the
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customers
of that
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business
and
therefore
the success of a
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business
depends, to a great extent, on it's
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customers
, which is
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only
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fair
. This is more relevant/applicable/true for
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small
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business
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then
it is for
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large
well-established ones which tend to have more variety in their products for their
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different
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customers
.
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Now
, there are other
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factors
which
also
affect where or not a
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small
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business
does well or not like natural disasters, or
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some
unforeseen circumstance beyond their control. These
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factors
, as unfortunate as they may be,
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theres
nothing much that can
be done
regarding them
besides
having a few fail-safes. Apart from these, there is another major
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factor
viz. the
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government
and their policies which is, to a
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large
extent, beyond the control of the
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business
and it's
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customers
and which has a huge impact on the way the
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business
operates and by extension the revenue it generates and it's growth
in general
.

Stance:
Mostly
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agree
.

Points:

1. Less
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government
influence means faster
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decision making
, smother operation, quick implementation of new policies, etc. since
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its
a
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small
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business. 2
. More room for
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change
and experimentation and
therefore
more potential to grow.

3.
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Faciliates
an environment which is more conducive to a mode of operation which is honest and
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fair
as there would be less number of unnecessary stringent
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government
policies that the
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business
may seek to circumvent by
potentially
illegal means.

Conclusion: A minimal
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government
influence is fine
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but
anything more than
that is
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just
unnecessary for
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small
scale
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businesses
and would
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only
serve as an obstacle or a
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deterrant
to the business' success.
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IELTS essay In order to help small businesses thrive, government should play a minimal role in private business matters

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