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The flowchart below shows the working of the advertisement on several methods.

The flowchart below shows the working of the advertisement on several methods. RWoy8
The given flowchart depicts the three ways the company hires new employees. According to the first way, within the company advertisement the first step they do is to make a shortlist of applicants and then do an interview. Moreover the second way, within the press is more about the same and there is one module is added which means they do shortlist and then do interview and after interview the test will be conducted and if the applicant passes the test, the job offer will be provided. As in within the company advertisement only interview will be conducted for a job offer. In the last way, external recruitment agency, this way is much complicated than other 2 ways, which is consist of advertisement by agency and advertisement within the company. In this way before doing an interview shortlist has to be presented to the employer, and then after the interview if the applicant cracks the interview they get a job offer. To conclude, for providing job they have different steps but that before advertisement use in all ways.
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flowchart depicts the three
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ways
the
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company
hires new employees.

According to the
first
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way
, within the
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company
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advertisement
the
first
step they do is to
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make
a shortlist of applicants and then do an
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interview
.
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Moreover
the second
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way
, within the press is more about the same and there is one module is
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added
which means they do shortlist and then do
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interview
and after
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interview
the
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test
will
be conducted
and if the applicant passes the
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test
, the
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job
offer will
be provided
. As in within the
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company
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advertisement
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only
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interview
will
be conducted
for a
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job
offer.

In the last
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way
, external recruitment agency, this
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way
is much complicated than other 2
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ways
, which is consist of
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advertisement
by agency and
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advertisement
within the
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company
. In this
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way
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before
doing an
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interview
shortlist
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has to
be presented
to the employer, and then after the
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interview
if the applicant cracks the
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interview
they
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get
a
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job
offer.

To conclude
, for providing
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job
they have
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different
steps
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that
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use
in all
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IELTS essay The flowchart below shows the working of the advertisement on several methods.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
178 words
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