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Abuse animals for human life

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Thesedays, the incresing of using nonhuman animals for daily demands. Many advocate that animals also have the freedom like human. Althought it can be argued that they should do the right missions and must supply for the demands of human. In this essay, I will disscuss both of views and give my opinion about this argument. On the one hand, some people argued that forcing animals to do and kill them for the sake of human, which is significant cruel. First of all, people compel animals do physical labor. Also, they become transportation to convey merchandises. For example, forcing buffalo to plow the fields. Furthermore, human also use elephants to transport woods and heavy goods. Finally, the cruel act of killing these animasl to eat and use their body part to sell with hight price. The clearest example is that human saw the rhino horn to sell, make rhino feel sad and die gradually. Nevertheless, the majority who suppose that human also need to survive. Firstly, people kill animals to make nutrition tht supply for their health. For instance, they eat meat of pig to supply protein and use the bone of bear spices to make retrorative. In conclusion, to my mind, both sides mentioned above are justifiable. Despite the fact that I am inclined to lean towards the former viewpoint because life of animals is as similar as human life. On the top of that, animals need to live in a life free of abuse.
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, the
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incresing
of using nonhuman
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animals
for daily demands.
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Many
advocate that
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animals
also
have the freedom like
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human
.
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Althought
it can
be argued
that they should do the right missions and
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must
supply for the demands of
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human
. In this essay, I will
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disscuss
both of views and give my opinion about this argument.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
argued that forcing
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animals
to do and kill them for the sake of
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human
, which is significant cruel.
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First of all
,
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people
compel
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animals
do physical labor.
Also
, they become transportation to convey merchandises.
For example
, forcing buffalo to plow the fields.
Furthermore
,
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human
also
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use
elephants to transport woods and heavy
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goods
.
Finally
, the cruel act of killing these
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animasl
to eat and
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use
their body part to sell with
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hight
price. The clearest example is that
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human
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saw
the rhino horn to sell,
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make
rhino feel sad and
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die
gradually
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Nevertheless
, the majority who suppose that
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human
also
need to survive.
Firstly
,
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people
kill
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animals
to
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make
nutrition
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tht
supply for their health.
For instance
, they eat meat of pig to supply protein and
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use
the bone of bear spices to
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make
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retrorative
.

In conclusion
, to my mind, both sides mentioned above are justifiable. Despite the fact that I
am inclined
to lean towards the former viewpoint
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because
life of
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animals
is as similar as
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human
life. On the top of that,
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animals
need to
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live
in a life free of abuse.
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IELTS essay Abuse animals for human life

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4 paragraphs
246 words
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