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The first time we try something can be exciting, frightening, and enlightening. Tell about an important "first" in your life and what you learn from the experience.

The first time we try something can be exciting, frightening, and enlightening. Tell about an important "first" in your life and what you learn from the experience. GMqoj
Beginning to swim in the water was my first moment to get a healthier body, I started to swim about 7 years ago, when It is really hard for me to lose weight. It is might be a little strange to anyone who heard my story. For me, it is such an exciting experience to get rid of the fear of water, because i need to get my body healthier than before. In my experience, learning to get rid of fear something can makes your life more easier than before.
Beginning to swim in the water was my
first
moment to
get
a healthier body, I
started
to swim about 7 years ago, when It is
really
hard
for me to lose weight.

It is might be a
little
strange to anyone who heard my story.

For me, it is such an exciting experience to
get
rid of the fear of water,
because
i
need to
get
my body healthier than
before
. In my experience, learning to
get
rid of fear something can
makes
your life
more easier
than
before
.
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IELTS essay The first time we try something can be exciting, frightening, and enlightening. Tell about an important "first" in your life and what you learn from the experience.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
90 words
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5.0
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