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The first impression your school

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Moreover, we are seniors even though when the graduation day, each individual experiences a wide spectrum of unfathomable sensations after 3 years ago at Phong Phu school. As a participant of the Phong Phu high school's first generation, we are proud and appreciative to be pioneers for knowledge acquisition from all the teachers in this school. I was delighted by the school's designed layout, as well as the infrastructures and facilities because the school was covered with the dominant blue tone, which is attractive to my youth. The school campus is massive with a long row of classrooms consisting of three floors. Our school has a tranquil and quaint atmosphere of its position in a residential area. In addition, Our school's equipment used to be less advanced than it is now, and we didn't have any money to spend on it. Bypasses, all labs seem to be well with equipment that allows thousands of students to broaden their horizons. The majority of the teaching staff is young, but they are enthusiastic about us, hence why they are enabled to enhance communication as they are talkative and hopeful. They're also modifying the lesson plans that guide pupils on how to avoid being jaded. It's one of the prominent causes why our students adored them. Our pals are some of the most outstanding characters from my school days. They are sympathetic and encouraging, assisting everyone in increasing the score's standards. Of furthermore, my school offers significant extracurricular activities, for instance, dance competitions, sports clubs, arts, music events, life skills. Academic instruction help students make progress in a variety of areas thereby establishing a tangible relationship between the employee and the student. Our school's rule took us by surprise, especially, the uniforms and sayings were strictly enforced. We assume that they merely desire us to be disciplined. In essence, our PPer aspirations have allowed us to learn many separate things since high school, allowing us to grow day by day, mature in thought, and have a good sense of self-direction when we were young. We are appreciative for these reminiscences.
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school
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school's
designed layout,
as well
as the infrastructures and facilities
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because
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school
was covered
with the dominant blue tone, which is attractive to my youth. The
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school
campus is massive with a long row of classrooms consisting of three floors. Our
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school
has a tranquil and quaint atmosphere of its position in a residential area.
In addition
, Our
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school's
equipment
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used
to be less advanced than it is
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now
, and we didn't have any money to spend on it. Bypasses, all labs seem to be well with equipment that
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allows
thousands of
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students
to broaden their horizons. The majority of the teaching staff is young,
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but
they are enthusiastic about us,
hence
why they
are enabled
to enhance communication as they are talkative and hopeful. They're
also
modifying the lesson plans that guide pupils on how to avoid
being jaded
. It's one of the prominent causes why our
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students
adored them. Our pals are
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some
of the most outstanding characters from my
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days. They are sympathetic and encouraging, assisting everyone in increasing the score's standards. Of
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school
offers significant extracurricular activities,
for instance
, dance competitions, sports clubs, arts, music
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events
, life
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skills
. Academic instruction
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help
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students
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make
progress in a variety of areas thereby establishing a tangible relationship between the employee and the
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student
. Our
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school's
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rule
took us by surprise,
especially
, the uniforms and sayings were
strictly
enforced. We assume that they
merely
desire us to
be disciplined
. In essence, our
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aspirations have
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allowed
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, allowing us to grow day by day, mature in
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thought
, and have a
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good
sense of self-direction when we were young. We are appreciative for these reminiscences.
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IELTS essay The first impression your school

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
347 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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