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The famous business person

The famous business person QV1GX

I describe Steve jobs. He is the most famous business person around the world I think. He established apple which is a company develops digital product. For example, smart phone, MC, and software. Today, a lot of people use iphone in Japan. This cell phone is made in apple. He was born in San Francisco US and he was put up for adoption to Mr. and Mrs. jobs. He was a naughty boy when he was a child. But he started studying hard since he met his former teacher. He met Wozniak who is the person developed apple computer with Jobs during high school. Jobs had bad personality and he was short tempered person. I heard the interesting story about jobs is he stole his team member’s idea and spoke in the conference as if he came up with the idea. Next, he was had to divide his compensation, but he gave his reword lager than his team members. I interested in job’s funny story so I want to read the books about his. He had four children. I heard this topic I was surprised because he was not got married. I had he have not got married. His family’s story was written in the book Small Fly. Speaking of job’s rival is Bill Gates who founded Microsoft, the world largest PC software company. Windows I uses everyday is his product. I can’t do anything without windows PC. They acknowledged each others. On the other hands, he died for pancrestic cancer in 2003. I was sad heard this news. But his product have been remained world. In the view of this, his invention is very great work.

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jobs
. He was a naughty boy when he was a child. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
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started
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hard
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apple
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Jobs
 during high school. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskappointmentofficebusinesscareerassignment
Jobs
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, he was Did you mean "hard"?hard
had
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but
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job’s
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Small
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. Speaking of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskappointmentofficebusinesscareerassignment
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 rival is Bill Gates who founded Microsoft, the world largest PC software This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
. Windows I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploits
uses
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everyday
 is his product. I can’t do anything without "Windows" (operating system by Microsoft) is a proper noun and needs to be capitalized.Windows
windows
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others
. On the other hands, he This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :passed away
died
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pancrestic
 cancer in 2003. I was sad heard this news. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 his product have been remained
 world. In the view of this, his invention is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 great work. 