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the factor make friendship longer

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Her name is Lucy, she is Vietnamese, living in Binh Duong province. We met on a game called Sky- Children of the light. We communicate through Facebook, sometimes we call and tell each other numerous interesting stories. She is pretty, she has short hair and a cute face with a dimple. Especially, her smile is so bright, I am sure you will definitely be impressed when you see her smile. Lucy is immensely personable and sociable, she is open to everyone around her and she always understands and cares for others. Up to now, we have known each other for almost 2 years and there is never been an argument between us I think we have a lasting friendship as now because we have many things in common and I think that is an vital factor make friendships live longer. This is in terms of life concept, same interests, goals and ideals. For instance, If you have a friend with similar passion, you can freely share your interests with best friend, such as playing the piano together, playing games together, even studying together to get better mark. Those things help to increase friendship even more. Or when you sad, there will a person who understand you and comfort you. And if you meet a friend who does not have the same interests and views, there will be disagreements between you, which will lead to broken friendships. So in the end, If we want to have a lasting friendship, we must stop arguing and arguing, lets understanding and sharing with each other is the best thing you can do
Her name is Lucy, she is Vietnamese, living in
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Binh
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Duong
province. We met on a game called Sky- Children of the light. We communicate through Facebook,
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sometimes
we call and
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tell
each other numerous interesting stories. She is pretty, she has short hair and a cute face with a dimple.
Especially
, her smile is
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so
bright, I am sure you will definitely
be impressed
when you
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see
her smile. Lucy is
immensely
personable and sociable, she is open to everyone around
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her and
she always understands and cares for others.

Up to
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now
, we have known each other for almost 2 years and there is never been an argument between us

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think
we have a lasting
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friendship
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we have
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things in common and I
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vital factor
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make
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friendships
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live
longer. This is in terms of life concept, same interests, goals and ideals.
For instance
, If you have a friend with similar passion, you can
freely
share your interests with best friend, such as playing the piano together, playing games together, even studying together to
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get
better mark. Those things
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help
to increase
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friendship
even more. Or when you
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sad
, there will a person who understand you and comfort you. And if you
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meet
a friend who does not have the same interests and views, there will be disagreements between you, which will lead to broken friendships.

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So
in the
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end
, If we want to have a lasting
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friendship
, we
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must
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arguing and arguing,
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understanding and sharing with each other is the best thing you can do
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IELTS essay the factor make friendship longer

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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