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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. v.1

The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. v. 1
Governments, environmentalists and large organisations, in many countries, are trying to curb environmental problems, and a part of this effort is to aware people about how they can contribute to environmental issues. It is surprising how our diet habits or the dresses we wear can all contribute to the environmental problems and that's why without involving ordinary citizens, government bodies and private organisations can't reverse the downward fall when it comes to the environment. To begin with, our environment is becoming worse with every passing day and without awareness among ordinary citizens, it will become impossible to achieve environmental protection. We, as ordinary citizens, are constantly contributing to global warming, pollution and climate change. The car we drive exhaust carbon dioxide, the dresses we wear require a huge amount of fibres and water, the plastic bags we use end up in the water, and even the diet we follow can increase the possibility of climate change. Thus, if people are not made cognizant of their actions that are directly or indirectly responsible for global warming, they won't fully comprehend the gravity of the intricacies and won't feel responsible. Climate change is so large a problem that only governments and large organizations can't work to find a solution for that and a coordinated effort is required. It is undeniable that countries have taken serious steps to curb environmental problems and our leaders are meeting frequently to discuss it. Restrictions are being in place on gas emissions, fossils fuel use, plastic production and use, and alternative sources of green energy are being researched and invested. But if the efforts are not made at an individual level, the magnitude of damage and pollutions would far outstrip the efforts. Finally, scientists, engineers, environmentalists and authority may come out with proposal and invest money in research, but they can't control the amount of plastic bags we use and throw away without recycling. Every environmental problem is related to our human lifestyle and unconsciousness and its high time to include a syllabus about environmental protection in our school. We have got only one planet to live in and we must save it. Whatever we do to the environment will return and affect us and all levels of education should emphasize how we can be more responsible to protect it. A joint approach by the authority and mass people can only make it happen.
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Governments
, environmentalists and large
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organisations
, in
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many
countries, are trying to curb
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environmental
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problems
, and a part of this effort is to aware
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people
about how they can contribute to
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environmental
issues. It is surprising how our diet habits or the dresses we wear can all contribute to the
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environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
and that's why without involving ordinary citizens,
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government
bodies and private
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organisations
can't reverse the downward fall when it
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comes
to the environment.

To
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begin
with, our environment is becoming worse with every passing day and without awareness among ordinary citizens, it will become impossible to achieve
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environmental
protection. We, as ordinary citizens, are
constantly
contributing to global warming, pollution and climate
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change
. The car we drive exhaust carbon dioxide, the dresses we wear require a huge amount of
Possible spelling mistake. 'fibres' is British English.
fibres
and water, the plastic bags we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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end
up in the water, and even the diet we follow can increase the possibility of climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.
Thus
, if
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people
are not made cognizant of their actions that are
directly
or
indirectly
responsible for global warming, they won't
fully
comprehend the gravity of the intricacies and won't feel responsible. Climate
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change
is
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so
large a
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problem
that
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only
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governments
and large
Do not mix variants of the same word ('organization' and 'organisation') within a single text.
organizations
can't work to find a solution for that and a coordinated effort
is required
.

It is undeniable that countries have taken serious steps to curb
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
and our leaders are meeting
frequently
to discuss it. Restrictions are being in place on gas emissions, fossils fuel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
, plastic production and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
, and alternative sources of green energy are
being researched
and invested.
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But
if the efforts are not made at an individual level, the magnitude of damage and pollutions would far outstrip the efforts.

Finally
, scientists, engineers, environmentalists and authority may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
out with proposal and invest money in research,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they can't control the amount of plastic bags we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
and throw away without recycling. Every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
is related
to our human lifestyle and unconsciousness and its high time to include a syllabus about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
protection in our school. We have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one planet to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
in and
we
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must
save it.

Whatever we do to the environment will return and affect us and all levels of education should emphasize how we can be more responsible to protect it. A joint approach by the authority and mass
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it happen.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
397 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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