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The elderly should live in nursing homes. Do you agree?

The elderly should live in nursing homes. Do you agree? rKnx2
Secondly, I would like to highlight that the action of placing parents in the nursing home will eradicate the sense of family in one's perspective. The elderly people might feel abandoned if they have been taking care by other people who are not their own blood. In my opinion, the elder people should not be abandoned by their families in their old age during which they need more emotional support than any other period in life. This could affect their physical and mental health and develop into negative psychological and emotional issues. For example, the elderly people such as our parents will act up by not eating or being not social with anyone due to not being familiar with everyone except for their own blood. This proven that, if we make our parents feel abandoned, we have no sense of family.
Secondly
, I would like to highlight that the action of placing parents in the nursing home will eradicate the sense of family in one's perspective. The elderly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
might feel abandoned if they have been taking care by other
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people
who are not their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
blood. In my opinion, the elder
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should not
be abandoned
by their families in their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
age during which they need more emotional support than any other period in life. This could affect their physical and mental health and develop into
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negative
psychological and emotional issues.
For example
, the elderly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
such as our parents will act up by not eating or being not social with anyone due to not being familiar with everyone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
except for
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
blood. This proven that, if we
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make
our parents feel abandoned, we have no sense of family.

IELTS essay The elderly should live in nursing homes. Do you agree?

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141 words
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