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The Effects of Soil Erosion in Vietnam

The Effects of Soil Erosion in Vietnam 5A61A
Vietnam is one of the country which have been exponentially increasing in agriculture production these past few years. It breached the rice production market, ranking as high as 5th place worldwide. Of course, every country had experienced challenges due to soil erosion, which leads to many problems, but how did they manage to cope with these things, or even find a solutions. The erosions in Vietnam is mostly caused by chemical erosion, an overused amount of chemical fertilizer and plants protection products. The chemical fertilizer are used to improve growth rate of crops, containing additional substance such as nitrogen, phosphorus and potassium compounds. The over usage of these chemical hardened the soil, and decreased fertility, strengthen pesticides, polluted water and air. In the end it is also toxic to human health and environment. A slightly smaller factor and still a major problem throughout the world is about climate change. Climate change impacts are such as drought and saltwater intrusion, but it is still seasonal. Droughts causes erosion due to effect of wind and flooding. Drying out the soil makes the soil less dense and lighter which then are eroded by the wind. The crops can suffer severe damage from these kind of things. Lastly, problems from intensive farming and deforestation. Aggressive farming removes the organic matter that binds the soil particle together, making the soil weaker when get exposed to heavy rain. All these are the main part of erosions problems and many more soil degradation problems. There are a lot more but those not mentioned would be minors. Dealing with all these problems for many years, the Vietnamese have created many ways to cope with their problem. Not only the locals were trying to fix their problems, but the Vietnamese government also took a big role in helping the situation. Solving the chemical fertilizer, was replaced by organic fertilizer instead. The Vietnamese governments priority was to help organic agriculture to use organic fertilizer. Vietnam have produced organic fertilizer from different materials by using different production technologies, but the production capacity is small and does not meet the demand for organic agriculture. Vietnam government encourages, promotes the organic fertilizer production, application and has the policy to develop the organic fertilizer in Vietnam. When El Nino, it usually have huge impact on Vietnamese drought. Strengthening the reservoir construction, the best way to cope with this is to store as much water as possible before the dryness, and increasing the efficacy of the irrigation systems for it to be spread in wider area for everyone. Moreover Vietnam have also made a very high-tech way to analysis erosions by radiation known as “Fallout radionuclides (FRNs)” they were used for war in the past but now it is used to detect erosions and origins. The concept is to assess soil erosion rates, and compound specific stable isotope analysis, which assists in tracing hot spots of land degradation. Erosions affects the top most fertile layer of soil the most. So, Vietnam, one of the best in agriculture, they mostly suffered from chemical fertilizations, and drought. The government was one of the main influences to solve these problems by bringing the organic fertilizations and strengthening reservoirs to cope with incoming seasonal drought disasters. Lastly one very High-Tec tool called “Fallout radionuclides (FRNs)” was used to help detect erosions in an area by radiation.
Vietnam is one of the country which have been
exponentially
increasing in
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agriculture
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production
these past few years. It breached the rice
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production
market, ranking as high as 5th place worldwide.
Of course
, every country had experienced challenges due to
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soil
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erosion
, which leads to
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many
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problems
,
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but
how did they manage to
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cope
with these things, or even find
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a solutions
.

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erosions
in Vietnam
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is
mostly
caused by
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chemical
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erosion
, an overused amount of
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chemical
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fertilizer
and plants protection products. The
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chemical
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fertilizer
are
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improve
growth rate of crops, containing additional substance such as nitrogen, phosphorus and potassium compounds.
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The
over usage of these
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chemical
hardened the
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soil
, and decreased fertility, strengthen pesticides, polluted water and air. In the
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end
it is
also
toxic to human health and environment. A
slightly
smaller factor and
still
a major
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problem
throughout the world is about climate
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change
. Climate
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impacts are such as
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drought
and saltwater intrusion,
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but
it is
still
seasonal.
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erosion
due to effect of wind and flooding. Drying out the
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soil
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makes
the
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less dense and lighter which then
are eroded
by the wind. The crops can suffer severe damage from
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these kind
of things.
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,
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problems
from intensive farming and deforestation. Aggressive farming removes the
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organic
matter that binds the
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soil
particle together, making the
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soil
weaker when
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get
exposed to heavy rain. All these are the main part of
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erosions
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problems
and
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more
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soil
degradation
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. There are a lot more
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but
those not mentioned would be minors.

Dealing with all these
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for
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years, the Vietnamese have created
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ways to
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with their
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. Not
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only
the locals were trying to
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their
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the Vietnamese
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also
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role in helping the situation. Solving the
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chemical
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fertilizer
,
was replaced
by
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organic
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fertilizer
instead
. The Vietnamese
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governments
priority was to
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organic
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agriculture
to
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use
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organic
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. Vietnam have produced
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from
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materials by using
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technologies,
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the
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capacity is
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small
and does not
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meet
the demand for
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organic
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agriculture
. Vietnam
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government
encourages, promotes the
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organic
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fertilizer
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production
, application and has the policy to develop the
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organic
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fertilizer
in Vietnam. When
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have
huge impact on Vietnamese
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drought
. Strengthening the reservoir construction, the best way to
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cope
with this is to store as much water as possible
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before
the dryness, and increasing the efficacy of the irrigation systems for it to
be spread
in wider area for everyone.
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also
made a
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high-tech way to analysis
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erosions
by radiation known as “Fallout radionuclides (
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used
for war in the past
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it is
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to detect
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erosions
and origins. The concept is to assess
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soil
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erosion
rates, and compound specific stable isotope analysis, which assists in tracing hot spots of land degradation.
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the top most fertile layer of
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the most.

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So
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, they
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chemical
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fertilizations
, and
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drought
. The
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government
was one of the main influences to solve these
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problems
by bringing the
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organic
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fertilizations
and strengthening reservoirs to
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cope
with incoming seasonal
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disasters.
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one
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very
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tool called “Fallout radionuclides (
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FRNs
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detect
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erosions
in an area by radiation.
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IELTS essay The Effects of Soil Erosion in Vietnam

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
557 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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