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The effect of Globalization to the dissolution of cultural identity and ethnic diversity

The effect of Globalization to the dissolution of cultural identity and ethnic diversity Wygme
Globalization has been a very popular issue in the world. The arguments between the drawbacks and positive effects in cultural identity and ethnic diversity have been the major discussion. In my view, I agree with the notion that local traditions are being devalued by this modernization. The modernization of globalization can directly affect the cultural diversity of a country. For example, the insurmountable influence of the internet and other social media affect the cultural views and belief of locals. Thus, the easy access to the internet allows people to connect and network with other countries and be exposed to their cultures. Thereby, in the countries of China and Iran, their government mandated to block numerous social media such as Facebook, Instagram, and Youtube. Hence, globalization tends to have tremendous effects in local and traditional clothing. Thereby, millennials in this generation have been imitating international fashion. As a result, the local wears are now being ignored. “millennials in this generation have been imitating international fashion” Globalization also influence the traditional food of a country, where the local economy is also affected. The widespread of international restaurants impacted the taste of choice of the locals. It is apparent that international cuisines are now being patronized by locals. For instance, the western food chain company Mcdonalds, which are present in almost all the countries in the world, is one of the most favorite. As a result, the local and traditional meals are being snubbed. Particularly, in the country of the Philippines where birthdays and fiestas are constantly celebrated. Most Filipinos prepare pancit and lechon as a traditional meal but in today’s generation, spaghetti and fried chicken are the main favorites. Thus, the traditional cuisines of a certain country are suffering. Overall, globalization has affected the culture and ethnic diversity of a country negatively. Furthermore, the drawbacks outweigh the advantages.
Globalization has been a
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very
popular issue in the world. The arguments between the drawbacks and
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positive
effects in cultural identity and ethnic diversity have been the major discussion. In my view, I
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agree
with the notion that
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local
traditions are
being devalued
by this modernization.

The modernization of globalization can
directly
affect the cultural diversity of a
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country
.
For example
, the insurmountable influence of the internet and other social media affect the cultural views and belief of
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locals
.
Thus
, the easy access to the internet
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allows
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people
to connect and network with other
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countries
and
be exposed
to their cultures. Thereby, in the
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countries
of China and Iran, their
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government
mandated to block numerous social media such as Facebook, Instagram, and
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Youtube
.
Hence
, globalization tends to have tremendous effects in
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local
and
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traditional
clothing. Thereby, millennials in this generation have been imitating
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international
fashion.
As a result
, the
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local
wears are
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now
being
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ignored
.

“
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millennials
in this generation have been imitating
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international
fashion”

Globalization
also
influence the
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traditional
food of a
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country
, where the
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local
economy is
also
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affected
.
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The widespread of
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international
restaurants impacted the taste of choice of the
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locals
. It is apparent that
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international
cuisines are
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now
being patronized
by
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locals
.
For instance
, the western food chain
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company
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Mcdonalds
, which are present in almost all the
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countries
in the world, is one of the most favorite.
As a result
, the
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local
and
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traditional
meals are
being snubbed
.
Particularly
, in the
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country
of the Philippines where birthdays and fiestas are
constantly
celebrated. Most Filipinos prepare
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pancit
and
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lechon
as a
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traditional
meal
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but
in
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today
’s generation, spaghetti and fried chicken are the main favorites.
Thus
, the
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traditional
cuisines of a certain
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country
are suffering.

Overall
, globalization has
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affected
the culture and ethnic diversity of a
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country
negatively
.
Furthermore
, the drawbacks outweigh the advantages.
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IELTS essay The effect of Globalization to the dissolution of cultural identity and ethnic diversity

Essay
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4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
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