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Money Can Make Life Easier And More Comfortable. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the present world, money makes a prominent role on part of the human life. Few people believed that all the rich people are enjoying their life with an great luxery and lavish. But, in my opinion, I strongly disagree that there are so many things to be necessary in part of life to make a happy. In this essay, I will illustrate with probable reasons to elaborate further. Firstly, peace of mind is much needed for us on both at personal and professional life. Even if we had a amount of currency, it wont help us to avoid the personal tensions and worries. Secondly, being a healthy is also plays a important in our daily cycle. Finally, we have to maintain good relationship with family and friends. When we face any problem, there is no matter if we have enough money without having great well wishers to support us. However, in a modern era, money is inter linked on every human’s need. It gives us all luxery and comfort life. To grown up as a walthy and prospurus life, it is mandatory. Moreover, it makes to a respect on that person in a society. In addition, the people who are rich will have power to rule the world. In conclusion, I would like to say that there is no limit to earn the money. But, people are so passionated to increase their revenue in terms of assets. Ultimately, it gives a happy at some extent to buy a basic needs. After that, healthy and prosperus life with a beautiful family is matters.
In the present world,
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. Few
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people
believed that all the rich
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people
are enjoying their
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with
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things to be necessary in part of
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to
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make
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a happy
. In this essay, I will illustrate with probable reasons to elaborate
further
.

Firstly
, peace of mind is
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much needed
for us on both at personal and professional
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life
. Even if we had
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a
amount of currency, it
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help
us to avoid the personal tensions and worries.
Secondly
, being
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a healthy
is
also
plays
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important
in our daily cycle.
Finally
, we
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maintain
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relationship with family and friends. When we face any problem, there is no matter if we have
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enough
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money
without having great
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well wishers
to support us.

However
, in a modern era,
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money
is
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inter
linked on every human’s need. It gives us all
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luxery
and comfort
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life
. To grown up as a
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walthy
and
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prospurus
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life
, it is mandatory.
Moreover
, it
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makes
to a respect on that person in a society.
In addition
, the
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people
who are rich will have power to
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rule
the world.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that there is no limit to earn the
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.
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But
,
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people
are
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so
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passionated
to increase their revenue in terms of assets.
Ultimately
, it gives a happy at
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some
extent to
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buy
a basic needs. After that, healthy and
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prosperus
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life
with a
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beautiful
family is matters.
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IELTS essay Money Can Make Life Easier And More Comfortable.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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