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the effect of advertisment

the effect of advertisment d36V7
Social and media bombard us with a plethora of advertising tricks. Psychologists in various ways have shown us how subtle ways of advertisements influence us unconsciously into buying their products. For instance, people gravitate to flaring pictures and videos on Instagram and Facebook. Misleading visuals. for instance, add extra beauties to unhealthy foods. As a result of more people like buying such foods. Social media have generally become an inseparable part of the majority of people’s life. These days we have seen high rate various of products which means there should be some advertising to introduce us the products but we should aware of good advertising made us buy bad products, especially in Iran. unfortunately, the Iranian companies which advertise their products don't care about what their customers want the only thing they care about is high products sales. Good advertising occurs for the companies who really considers their customers taste and quality of product for save their customers. I think in our country, Iran more regulatory efforts must be made to improve the quality of ads and attract people In large quantities. Overall, because of the intensive impression Advertisers should advert quality also people have to pay attention what they want to buy and why they want to buy.
Social and media bombard us with a plethora of advertising tricks. Psychologists in various ways have shown us how subtle ways of advertisements influence us
unconsciously
into buying their
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products
.
For instance
,
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people
gravitate to flaring pictures and videos on Instagram and Facebook. Misleading visuals.
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for
instance,
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add
extra beauties to unhealthy foods.
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As
a result of more
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people
like buying such foods. Social media have
generally
become an inseparable part of the majority of
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people’s
life.

These days we have
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seen
high rate various of
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products
which means there should be
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some
advertising to introduce us the
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products
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but
we
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should aware
of
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good
advertising made us
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buy
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bad
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products
,
especially
in Iran.
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unfortunately
, the Iranian
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companies
which advertise their
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products
don't care about what their customers want the
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only
thing they care about is high
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products
sales.

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Good
advertising occurs for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
who
really
considers their customers taste and quality of
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product
for save their customers.

I
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think
in our country, Iran more regulatory efforts
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must
be made
to
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improve
the quality of ads and attract
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people
In large quantities.

Overall
,
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because
of the intensive impression

Advertisers should advert quality
also
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people
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have to
pay attention what they want to
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buy
and why they want to
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buy
.
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IELTS essay the effect of advertisment

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
210 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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