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The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school." To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

People are life long learners. Usually, we get education from home and form environment. As families are the first teachers to the children, they learn a lot from the family. We can be natured the emotional quotient skill from the family. The elders teach the younger ones the way of living: how to behave among the people, how to cope the stress, how to adapt the changes and so on. Moreover, we can learn the religious and cultural value from the family. Not only we learnt the good habits but also the bad habits from family. If the family members have toxic relationship and bad characters, it may influence the juniors as well. As school education is mainly for intelligent quotient, we learned the essential knowledge like sciences, arts, language, sports and social skill. It is also important for the children to be educated adult. Moreover, it can enhance the social network of the children. Here again, if the education system is not fit for the need from the learners, it may also give some unwanted results such as depression, school bullies and delinquency. While comparing which education is more important, it is still controversial. Since both are equally important for the children to be perfect and successful mentally and socially. Personally, I think family education is more important and can influence the school education performance. The mature and clever child can manage his life to be successful, which means not only well educated and rich but also beneficial to society.
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are
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learners.
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, we
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get
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education
from home and form environment.

As
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families
are the
first
teachers to the
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children
, they learn a lot from the
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family
. We can be
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natured
the emotional quotient
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skill
from the
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family
. The elders teach the younger ones the way of living: how to behave among the
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people
, how to cope the
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stress
, how to adapt the
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changes
and
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so
on.
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, we can learn the religious and cultural value from the
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family
. Not
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only
we
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learnt
the
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good
habits
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but
also
the
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bad
habits from
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family
. If the
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family
members have toxic relationship and
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bad
characters, it may influence the juniors
as well
.

As school
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education
is
mainly
for intelligent quotient, we learned the essential knowledge like sciences, arts, language, sports and social
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skill
. It is
also
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important
for the
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children
to
be educated
adult.
Moreover
, it can enhance the social network of the
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children
. Here again, if the
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education
system is not fit for the need from the learners, it may
also
give
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some
unwanted results such as depression, school bullies and delinquency.

While comparing which
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education
is more
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important
, it is
still
controversial. Since both are
equally
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important
for the
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children
to be perfect and successful mentally and
socially
.

Personally
, I
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think
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family
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education
is more
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important
and can influence the school
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education
performance. The mature and clever child can manage his life to be successful, which means not
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only
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well educated
and rich
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but
also
beneficial to society.
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IELTS essay The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. "

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
251 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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