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the diss advantage of an extended family

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Nowadays, extended family hasn’t been the dominant family structure as in the part and this change brings about several benefits. First and foremost, the main benefit is financial. When living together, the burden of all costs coming from grandparents and children is shouldered by two wages. In the contrast, in a nuclear family, the father and mother just concern about their offspring. As a consequence, they are easier in providing children with golden chances to broaden their horizons since they can study in a top-notch school or let off steam in recreational centres. Secondly, the generation gap can be seen as the main culprit in making conflicts between youngsters and seniors. For instance, in terms of taking care of a newborn, the modern method is immensely different from the old one, which can lead to break the relationship between mother–in–law and wife. If this problem can’t be addressed, it will be the reason why the wife is depressed. In conclusion, it is reasonable that nuclear family is the mainstream

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family
 hasn’t been the dominant You use this word too often, consider replacing it withclantribegrouppeoplehousehousehold
family
 structure as in the part and this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
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 and foremost, the main benefit is financial. When living together, the burden of all costs coming from grandparents and children is shouldered
 by two wages. In the contrast, in a nuclear You use this word too often, consider replacing it withclantribegrouppeoplehousehousehold
family
, the father and mother This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
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centres
. Secondly
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seen
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, in terms of taking care of a newborn, the modern method is immensely
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different
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old
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mother–in–law
 and wife. If this problem can’t be addressed
, it will be the reason why the wife is depressed
. In conclusion
, it is reasonable that nuclear You use this word too often, consider replacing it withclantribegrouppeoplehousehousehold
family
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