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Purdue Statement of purpose for students

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The role where, as an engineer, I could explore my space in management and could better understand a technical perspective to work as a team to achieve a North star is always my admiration. This mere admiration took a form first, when I started working as an intern and then developed into a solid inspiration after working with a corporate like Jones Lang LaSalle (JLL) in a role like Data Engineer for a year and half. The determination to pursue a degree which could help me accomplish my dream role came from one of my projects at work. I had been delegated the role of a Developer and BAU support person in my initial project, where the team had only a minimum resource to support the application and I had a crucial role to play. With time and exposure, I am keen to stay connected to the technological aspects and at the same time to culminate my ability to manage a team. The Engineering Management program is a platform where I could learn to better myself tomorrow than what I’m today. For undergraduation, I enrolled in the Electronics and communication Engineering(ECE) course at Amrita School of Engineering, Amrita Vishwa Vidyapeetham where I was equally inclined towards core electronics as well as computer science courses. I attended a couple of inplant training at BHEL, BEL and Internet of Things(IOT) workshop at IIT Madras Research Park during my 5th and 6th semester. Apart from my academics, I have completed some projects to enhance my practical skills. My first project was completed in 6 weeks of time to emulate a dynamic water level indicator. In this project, which was done during my 6th semester, I led a team of 3 students where each one of us contributed equally. The second project was done during my 7th semester, where I automated the ABC (Accelerator, Clutch, Break) controls in a vehicle. I had an opportunity to present and publish my project at the “First International Conference on Advances In Physical Sciences and Materials” (ICAPSM). With both my projects at college, I had learnt the sense of time management, teamwork and problem solving ability. I had a penchant for computers and information technology which drove me in choosing a career in that field. I was the only student in my entire campus to be selected for the position of Data Engineer at Jones Lang LaSalle (JLL) which is a multinational and a Fortune 500 company. I chose to work as an intern at JLL in the data engineering team, during my last semester to acquire working knowledge. During my intern days, I developed a Project Management tool using SQL, SSIS and Power BI. This indeed gave me a good level of confidence which galvanized me to achieve my Microsoft certifications in SQL, Power BI and Microsoft Azure. I started my full time project in my late internship days where I supported the existing UK real estate application. My initial project “Lucidity” analysed the data from multiple Property Management Systems and provided a holistic business solution to UK clients. My role was to map all the raw data from the systems with the respective targets after cleansing them. With working on support tickets, I managed to master the cumbersome mappings efficiently followed by feature developments and bug fixes. During my tenure, I had developed multiple dashboards to facilitate the process and my clients are still using my robustic dashboards. I had the opportunity to display my leadership qualities by mentoring new recruits. In the months of February and March 2021, I worked on both my projects. In addition to my role in my project, I had also taken the responsibility of pre and post production deployment activities which focused on monitoring the stability of the server. Upon my performance in that project, I was promoted to a critical project, which focused on extensive, advanced on-market tech stack with Microsoft cloud tools like Microsoft Azure and Databricks. I have contributed to the development of global applications in my current project. My applications, namely, “Conflict Check” and “Radius” which indicate conflicts amongst various facilities management companies. It's been almost 5 months down the line now, where I’m experimenting with multiple things. This project was much challenging technically, as it was demanding a high technical expertise. Being the youngest in the team with comparatively lesser exposure, I still worked hard to match up to other tenured developers. I had a chance to develop a major chunk upon seeing my evolution from a neophyte to an adept developer. Apart from my mainstream goals, I had always been willing to display uniqueness and leadership activities right from my high school. I have actively taken part in many inter school competitions and have won accolades. I represented my school at the Times of India workshop for school students. I was also delegated the role as President of the Rotary club during my 11th grade. In my tenure as the President of the Rotary Club, I had been an ardent proponent of the “Save Water” theme. I have also contributed in supporting afforestation by creating awareness among my schoolmates. I had equally taken part in sports like Throwball and Kho-Kho at intra school and intra college events. During my college days, I had to train a group of 35 students to perform in a Musical event. I was the co-head of the Transportation department in my college’s Technical Festival, which is one among the top events in India. In this role, I effectively managed the logistics for transportation services. I had always had a penchant for management but my equal passion towards technology has created an inclination in me towards Engineering management. It's a privilege to aim for such a reputed institute which has excellent learning initiatives and resources. Located in a great community, this university would play an essential role for my eminence. Your friendly policies would facilitate me in creating an equilibrium between my professional and personal skills. The course and the course outcomes at your university had clearly coincided with my ideal requirement, and at Purdue to gain new experiences. I would like to gain some expertise in Product Management, Supply Chain and Risk Analysis as well along with equal technical emphasis on Data Analytics. Being a data engineer myself, I feel when given the right exposure and experience, I can understand the concerns of a developer from his shoes where I will think as a developer and at the same time with my managerial skills help deduce a problem with my pragmatic solutions. Having been a key factor to the culmination of great people like Ms. Lila Ibraham who went on to become a COO of DeepMind and given a platform to master techniques similar to that of Sir Neil Armstrong. At Purdue, I strongly believe that I will get exposed to a plethora of opportunities where I can garner the skills which constitute the stint of an engineering manager where I can learn the right management techniques and approaches and master in my technical space to become someone to look up to in future. With the Co-op experiences, I will have some practical training, where I can emulate all my learning. I look upto myself in either a position up the scale in a reputed corporation or as an entrepreneur trying to set up my own company.
The
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role
where, as an
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engineer
, I could explore my space in
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management
and could better understand a
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technical
perspective to work as a
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team
to achieve a North star is always my admiration. This mere admiration took a form
first
, when I
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started
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working
as an intern and then developed into a solid inspiration after
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working
with a corporate like Jones Lang
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LaSalle
(
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JLL
) in a
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role
like
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Data
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Engineer
for a year and half. The determination to pursue a degree which could
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help
me accomplish my dream
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role
came from one of my
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projects
at work. I had
been delegated
the
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role
of a
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Developer
and BAU support person in my initial
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project
, where the
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team
had
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only
a minimum resource to support the application and I had a crucial
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role
to play. With
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time
and exposure, I am keen to stay connected to the technological aspects and at the same
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time
to culminate my ability to manage a
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team
. The
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Engineering
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Management
program is a platform where I could learn to better myself
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tomorrow
than what I’m
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today
.

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undergraduation
, I enrolled in the Electronics and communication Engineering(ECE)
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course
at Amrita
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School
of
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Engineering
, Amrita
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Vishwa
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Vidyapeetham
where I was
equally
inclined towards core electronics
as well
as computer science
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courses
. I attended a couple of
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inplant
training at
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BHEL
,
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BEL
and Internet of Things(IOT) workshop at IIT Madras Research Park during my 5th and 6th semester. Apart from my academics, I have completed
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some
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projects
to enhance my practical
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skills
. My
first
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project
was completed
in 6 weeks of
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time
to emulate a dynamic water level indicator. In this
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project
, which
was done
during my 6th semester, I led a
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team
of 3
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students
where each one of us contributed
equally
. The second
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project
was done
during my 7th semester, where I automated the ABC (Accelerator, Clutch, Break) controls in a vehicle. I had an opportunity to present and publish my
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project
at the “
First
International Conference on Advances In Physical Sciences and Materials” (
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ICAPSM
). With both my
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projects
at college, I had
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learnt
the sense of
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time
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management
, teamwork and problem solving ability.

I had a penchant for computers and information technology which drove me in choosing a career in that field. I was the
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only
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student
in my entire campus to
be selected
for the position of
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Data
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Engineer
at Jones Lang
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LaSalle
(
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JLL
) which is a multinational and a Fortune 500
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company
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I
chose to work as an intern at
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JLL
in the
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data
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engineering
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team
, during my last semester to acquire
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working
knowledge. During my intern days, I developed a
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Project
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Management
tool using SQL,
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SSIS
and Power BI. This
indeed
gave me a
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good
level of confidence which galvanized me to achieve my Microsoft certifications in SQL, Power BI and Microsoft Azure. I
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started
my full
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time
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project
in my late internship
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days where
I supported the existing UK real estate application.

My initial
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project
“Lucidity”
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analysed
the
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data
from multiple Property
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Management
Systems and provided a holistic business solution to UK clients. My
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role
was to map all the raw
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data
from the systems with the respective targets after cleansing them. With
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working
on support tickets, I managed to master the cumbersome mappings
efficiently
followed by feature developments and bug
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fixes
. During my tenure, I had developed multiple dashboards to facilitate the process and my clients are
still
using my
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robustic
dashboards. I had the opportunity to display my leadership qualities by mentoring new recruits. In the months of February and March 2021, I worked on both my
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projects
.
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to my
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role
in
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my


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project
, I had
also
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pre
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post production
deployment activities which focused on monitoring the stability of the server.

Upon my performance in that
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project
, I
was promoted
to a critical
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project
, which focused on extensive, advanced on-market tech stack with Microsoft cloud tools like Microsoft Azure and
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Databricks
. I have contributed to the development of global applications in my
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current
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project
. My applications,
namely
, “Conflict
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Check
” and “Radius” which indicate conflicts amongst various
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facilities
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management
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companies
. It's been almost 5 months down the line
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now
, where I’m experimenting with multiple things. This
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project
was much challenging
technically
, as it was demanding a high
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technical
expertise. Being the youngest in the
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team
with
comparatively
lesser exposure, I
still
worked
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hard
to match up to other tenured
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developers
. I had a chance to develop a major chunk upon seeing my evolution from a neophyte to an adept developer.

Apart from my mainstream goals, I had always been willing to display uniqueness and leadership activities right from my high
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school
. I have
actively
taken part in
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many
inter
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competitions and have won accolades. I represented my
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school
at the
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Times
of India workshop for
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was
also
delegated the
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role
as President of the Rotary club during my 11th grade. In my tenure as the President of the Rotary Club, I had been an ardent proponent of the “Save Water” theme. I have
also
contributed in supporting afforestation by creating awareness
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among
my schoolmates. I had
equally
taken part in sports like
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Throwball
and
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Kho-Kho
at
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intra
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school
and
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intra
college
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events
. During my college days, I had to train a group of 35
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students
to perform in a Musical
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event
. I was the co-head of the Transportation department in my college’s
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Technical
Festival, which is one
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among
the top
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events
in India. In this
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role
, I
effectively
managed the logistics for transportation services.

I had always had a penchant for
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management
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but
my equal passion towards technology has created an inclination in me towards
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Engineering
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management
. It's a privilege to aim for such a reputed institute which has excellent learning initiatives and resources. Located in a great community, this university would play an essential
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role
for my eminence. Your friendly policies would facilitate me in creating an equilibrium between my professional and personal
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skills
. The
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course
and the
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course
outcomes at your university had
clearly
coincided with my ideal requirement, and at Purdue to gain new experiences. I would like to gain
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some
expertise in Product
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Management
, Supply Chain and
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Risk
Analysis
as well
along with equal
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technical
emphasis on
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Data
Analytics. Being a
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data
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engineer
myself, I feel when
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given
the right exposure and experience, I can understand the concerns of a
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developer
from his shoes where I will
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think
as a
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developer
and at the same
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time
with my managerial
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skills
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help
deduce a problem with my pragmatic solutions. Having been a key factor to the culmination of great
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people
like Ms. Lila
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Ibraham
who went on to become a COO of
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DeepMind
and
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given
a platform to master techniques similar to that of Sir Neil Armstrong. At Purdue, I
strongly
believe that I will
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get
exposed to a plethora of opportunities where I can garner the
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skills
which constitute the stint of an
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engineering
manager where I can learn the right
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management
techniques and approaches and master in my
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technical
space to become someone to look up to
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in future
. With the Co-op experiences, I will have
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practical training, where I can emulate all my learning. I look
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myself in either a position up the scale in a reputed corporation or as an entrepreneur trying to set up my
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IELTS essay Purdue Statement of purpose for students

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
1228 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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