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The date is April 22nd 2038, and you and your classmate have just arrived at a planet that is similar to our Earth. You will live there for 20 years. Work together and make notes to describe the planet. Includes a discussion on what 10 things to bring.

The date is April 22nd 2038, and you and your classmate have just arrived at a planet that is similar to our Earth. You will live there for 20 years. Work together and make notes to describe the planet. Includes a discussion on what 10 things to bring. JKra5
After the apocalypse on planet Earth, I and one of my friends decide to go into space to search for a second Earth. On the faithful day of April 22th 2038, we manage to find a planet that is viable for us to stay in for at least 20 years. That planet is called Mars. At first glance, Mars is substantially larger than Earth, with the diameter being almost 1. 5 times as long as that of Earth. As for Mars’s surface temperature, its minimum and maximum value are lower than that of Earth, which indicates that Mars is colder than Earth, though the discrepancy is negligible. As far as I concern, there is no sign of life found on the Red planet, but it can surprise us with some never-before-seen living creatures. There are a total of 2 natural satellites revolving around Mars, while Mars itself takes slightly over 1 day to rotate around its axis. Before stepping on the planet, we make a thorough preparation about what to bring, and as a result, we set off with 10 vital items. Knowing that there will be no deadly animals, we believe that guns were redundant, and therefore should be left behind. However, necessities like food, water, and medicine are crucial as they allow us to survive in the hostile environment, for which Mars is infamous. We contemplate bringing computers and televisions due to the lack of power source, but thanks to my non-finite electricity generator that I invented when I was still on Earth, we conclude that we will pack these digital items. Things like clothes and books are unnecessary in our eyes because they do not contribute to our demand for survival. Likewise, pets and cameras are eliminated from the list for their low duration on an unfamiliar planet. A shelter is extremely imperative when living in a different environment, so tents are a must for us. Since we have an intention of landing at a waterfront area, we will carry boats, as well as farming tools to sustain ourselves by producing food and water. Finally, in case we get involved in special scenarios like trading with other people who also live on Mars and staying awake, we will bring some money and coffee bags.
After the apocalypse on
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planet
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Earth
, I and one of my friends decide to go into space to search for a second
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Earth
. On the faithful day of April
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22th
2038, we manage to find a
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planet
that is
viable for us to stay in for at least 20 years. That
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planet
is called
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Mars
. At
first
glance,
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Mars
is
substantially
larger than
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Earth
, with the diameter being almost 1. 5 times as long as that of
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Earth
. As for Mars’s surface temperature, its minimum and maximum value are lower than that of
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Earth
, which indicates that
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Mars
is colder than
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Earth
, though the discrepancy is negligible. As far as I concern, there is no
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sign
of life found on the Red
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planet
,
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but
it can surprise us with
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never-
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before
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seen
living creatures. There are a total of 2 natural satellites revolving around
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Mars
, while
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Mars
itself takes
slightly
over 1 day to rotate around its axis.
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Before
stepping on the
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planet
, we
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make
a thorough preparation about what to bring, and
as a result
, we set off with 10 vital items. Knowing that there will be no deadly animals, we believe that guns were redundant, and
therefore
should be
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left
behind.
However
, necessities like food, water, and medicine are crucial as they
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allow
us to survive in the hostile environment, for which
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Mars
is infamous. We contemplate bringing computers and televisions due to the lack of power source,
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but
thanks to my non-finite electricity generator that I invented when I was
still
on
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Earth
, we conclude that we will pack these digital items. Things like clothes and books are unnecessary in our eyes
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because
they do not contribute to our demand for survival.
Likewise
, pets and cameras
are eliminated
from the list for their low duration on an unfamiliar
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planet
. A shelter is
extremely
imperative when living in a
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different
environment,
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so
tents are a
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must
for us. Since we have an intention of landing at a waterfront area, we will carry boats,
as well
as farming tools to sustain ourselves by producing food and water.
Finally
, in case we
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get
involved in special scenarios like trading with other
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people
who
also
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live
on
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Mars
and staying awake, we will bring
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some
money and coffee bags.
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IELTS essay The date is April 22nd 2038, and you and your classmate have just arrived at a planet that is similar to our Earth. You will live there for 20 years. Work together and make notes to describe the planet. Includes a discussion on what 10 things to bring.

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