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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? xjYw
Smoking is injurious to health. This statement is well-known, however, people still fail to understand its implications and continue to smoke. Cigarettes are often pushed through media and marketing or even peer pressure and this habit can be eradicated through family support combined with awareness campaigns. Generally, impressionable young adults get started on cigarettes because they are often advertised to be "cool" by various media such as movies, books and celebrity endorsements. Teenagers view these sources of entertainment and imitate this action as their way of being similar to their favourite celebrity leading to the building of this bad habit. Similarly, peer pressure is another reason why people pick up habitual smoking. They are forced by their friends or close circle to smoke once or twice eventually leading to addiction. Although everyone recognizes the impact of smoking on their health, they do not quite grasp the gravity of the repercussions. If we want people to quit this atrocious addiction, we first have to make them realize how painful and deadly the continuation would be. For instance, the Nepali government ordered cigarette manufacturers to print the aftermath of long-term smoking on product packaging. This caused smokers to be horrified at the effects of their habits compelling them to reflect on their choices. Another way we can encourage users to stop is by showing emotional support pushing them to quit smoking. This can prove to be effective as people who continue using cigarettes can be depressed or anxious, so family support can help them get rid of this habit. In conclusion, smoking can have a scary impact on the life of users which is often promoted media and supported by peer groups. This habit can be discouraged by emotional support and public awareness programs.
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however
,
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people
still
fail to understand its implications and continue to smoke.
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are
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often
pushed through media and marketing or even peer pressure and this
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habit
can
be eradicated
through family
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support
combined with awareness campaigns.

Generally
, impressionable young adults
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get
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started
on
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cigarettes
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because
they are
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often
advertised to be
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cool
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by various media such as movies, books and celebrity endorsements.
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Teenagers
view these sources of entertainment and imitate this action as their way of being similar to their
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favourite
celebrity leading to the building of this
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bad
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habit
.
Similarly
, peer pressure is another reason why
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people
pick up habitual
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smoking
. They
are forced
by their friends or close circle to smoke once or twice
eventually
leading to addiction.

Although everyone recognizes the impact of
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smoking
on their health, they do not quite grasp the gravity of the repercussions. If we want
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people
to quit this atrocious addiction, we
first
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have to
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make
them realize how painful and deadly the continuation would be.
For instance
, the Nepali
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government
ordered
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cigarette
manufacturers to print the aftermath of long-term
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smoking
on product packaging. This caused smokers to
be horrified
at the effects of their
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habits
compelling them to reflect on their choices. Another way we can encourage users to
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stop
is by showing emotional
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support
pushing them to quit
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smoking
. This can prove to be effective as
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people
who continue using
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cigarettes
can
be depressed
or anxious,
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so
family
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support
can
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help
them
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get
rid of this habit.

In conclusion
,
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smoking
can have a scary impact on the life of users which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
promoted media and supported by peer groups. This
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habit
can
be discouraged
by emotional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
and public awareness programs.
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IELTS essay The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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