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The contribution of various economic sector of gross domestic product to xcountry in 2016,2017and2018.

The contribution of various economic sector of gross domestic product to xcountry in 2016, 2017and2018. 2aJmX
To begin with, in2016, percentage of gross domestic product for agriculture which accounted for 13%. while, contribution of industry and service this was noticed as 22%and 65% respectively. Furthermore, in 2017, lowest percentage of agriculture 11% and 25% donation for industry whereas, the highest percentage of gross household things for service 64%. Moving Further, contribution to agriculture for gross domestic thing that was noticed at 15% in 2017. After that, 30%and 55% donation to gross domestic material for industry and service in 2018. Overall, it can be cleared that, donation for gross domestic violence to service was highest among other but less contribution of agriculture.
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11% and 25% donation for industry whereas, the highest percentage of gross household things for
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service
64%. Moving
Further
, contribution to
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agriculture
for gross
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domestic
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at 15% in 2017. After that, 30%and 55% donation to gross
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material for industry and
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service
in 2018.
Overall
, it can
be cleared
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domestic
violence to
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service
was highest among other
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less contribution of
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agriculture
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IELTS essay The contribution of various economic sector of gross domestic product to xcountry in 2016, 2017and2018.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
105 words
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