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The consumption of the world’s resources is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are causes and solutions?

The consumption of the world’s resources is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are causes and solutions? Mnra
In the 21st century as the population is increasing at a fast pace our resources are depleting year after year, The most common reason is the increase demand and industrialization, With regard to solution long term planning and strict laws is the way to move ahead. Growing population is consuming the resources at an exponential rates, With every year there is surge in land for housing. Moreover, It put additional burden on agriculture land as a result farm land is used for the purpose of building houses consequently there is shortage of food hence a lot of things are imported to meet the rising needs. For example every year Govt. data show the agrarian land is depreciating at a alarming rate also our import is on higher side compare to the export which is not good for any country. As far as industrialization is concerned industrial sector need energy for the manufacturing as a result increase mining of natural sources like coal, Petroleum has gone high on the other hand there is spike in all the kind of pollutions as well human diseases namely cancer, skin disease. Industrialization has put a burden on natural sources hence reserve of coal and petroleum are also depleting in our country. Talking about solution most essential step is to make long term planning, growing demand of energy can be full-filled with nuclear energy, Solar or hydro as well as wind energy. They can provide unlimited source of energy with minimal effect on the environment. Next step is planned housing, Government must ensure that multi family homes should be build to full-fill the demand, sky scrappers like metropolitan area should be built more often. On the other hand government should work on planned parenthood special benefits and incentives should be given to families who work on the idea of planned parenthood and keep the number of their family to minimum. To conclude population explosion will utilize the sources very high pace but on the other hand proper planning and control of population is a feasible step taken to curb this trend.
In the 21st century as the
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population
is increasing at a
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fast
pace our resources are depleting
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year
after
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year
, The most common reason is the increase demand and industrialization, With regard to solution long term planning and strict laws is the way to
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move
ahead.

Growing
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population
is consuming the resources at an exponential rates, With every
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year
there is surge in
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land
for housing.
Moreover
, It put additional burden on agriculture
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land
as a result
farm
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land
is
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used
for the purpose of building
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houses
consequently
there is shortage of food
hence
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a lot of
things
are imported
to
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meet
the rising needs.
For example
every
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year
Govt. data
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show
the agrarian
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land
is depreciating at
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a
alarming rate
also
our import is on higher side compare to the export which is not
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good
for any country. As far as industrialization
is concerned
industrial sector need
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energy
for the manufacturing
as a result
increase mining of natural
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sources
like coal, Petroleum has gone high
on the other hand
there is spike in all the kind of pollutions
as well
human diseases
namely
cancer, skin disease. Industrialization has put a burden on natural
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sources
hence
reserve of coal and petroleum are
also
depleting in our country.

Talking about solution most essential step is to
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make
long term planning, growing demand of
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energy
can be full-filled with nuclear
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energy
, Solar or hydro
as well
as wind
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energy
. They can provide unlimited
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source
of
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energy
with minimal effect on the environment.
Next
step
is planned
housing,
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Government
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must
ensure that multi family homes should be build to full-fill the demand, sky scrappers like metropolitan area should
be built
more
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often
.
On the other hand
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government
should work on planned parenthood special benefits and incentives should be
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given
to families who work on the
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idea
of planned parenthood and
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keep
the number of their family to minimum.

To conclude
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population
explosion will utilize the
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sources
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very
high pace
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but
on the other hand
proper planning and control of
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population
is a feasible step taken to curb this trend.
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IELTS essay The consumption of the world’s resources is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are causes and solutions?

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