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When I heard the sound, I slowly turned around.

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When I heard the sound, I slowly turned around. Aaah-! - I shouted - A tiger? ! Falling, I didn't expect it to turn out like this. I originally intended to go into the forest for a bit and then return. Who would have thought that getting lost and hearing a strange noise that was the roar of this tiger? I thought that would be the end of my life and I closed my eyes when it jumped at me. "Wow", when I opened my eyes, I saw a dog wriggling in my arms. I don't think it's a dog because it's hairy like a tiger. I breathed a sigh of relief and said goodbye to the dog and headed home.
When I heard the sound, I
slowly
turned around.
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Aaah
-!
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I shouted
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A tiger? ! Falling, I didn't
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expect
it to turn out like this. I
originally
intended to go into the forest for a bit and then return. Who would have
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thought
that getting lost and hearing a strange noise that was the roar of this tiger? I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that would be the
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end
of my life and I closed my eyes when it jumped at me.
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"
Wow
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"
, when I opened my eyes, I
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saw
a dog wriggling in my arms. I don't
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think
it's a dog
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because
it's hairy like a tiger. I breathed a sigh of relief and said goodbye to the dog and headed home.
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IELTS essay When I heard the sound, I slowly turned around.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
121 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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