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The brightest star in the sky

The brightest star in the sky awqXX

The Brightest Star In The Sky I lay down on my bed, Fall asleep Gary, it is already midnight, tomorrow is going to be another long day, I said to myself. “Beep, Beep. ” Just as I was trying to put myself to sleep, the disturbing sound of a vital sign monitor triggered every single nerve in my body. I put on a shirt and rushed to my dad’s room. “Is everything ok? ” I asked apprehensively. “He’s alright, the blood pressure was a bit low, so it triggered the alert. ” My uncle answered as he put his hand on my shoulder. He told me not to worry and rest for tomorrow. I looked at my dad, still as always, and I was filled with relief that nothing had happened. “If anything happens, I promise that I will let you know immediately, ” My uncle promised me calmly. I sneaked out of my father's room quietly and came back to my room to lie on my bed again. Behind the window in the ceiling of my room laid an early morning sky; the sun was coming up and I looked for signs of clouds. White clouds are always my favorite: pure and carefree, but all I could find was the dimming sky and a faint moonlight without a single trace of clouds. . . … I sobbed quietly； I could not pinpoint my emotion. When I closed my tired eyes, memories of my childhood flashed by in my head. From the times when we went on a road trip across half of China, the time when we went to the adventure park, to the time when we visited Canada for the first time， my father was always there. I was always surrounded by the love and support of both my parents and the idea of losing one wrapped me in fear, uncertainty, and terror. Not too long ago, my father was diagnosed with “Cholangiocarcinoma” and my reality turned upside down overnight. I fell asleep shortly after. “Beep, beep, beep…” I was violently taken out of sleep by the sound of the vital sign monitor again. My heart sank. The sound of the alert was not like the ones I heard last night; it was much more intensive and it only amplified over time as if it’s roaring for help. “It’s a red alert. ” Seconds after I realized the urgency of the situation, I sprinted into my dad’s room half-naked. I stopped by the door, struck by pain and shock of what was happening. My dad was breathing heavily, and his body was covered in sweat as he put up a battle with the demon inside of him. His face was pale and dark yellow like sand from jaundice that was caused by cancer. His body was swelled up twice his size from the deterioration of blood circulation. I carefully moved closer to my father to see his face. I could tell from his eyes that he didn’t want to leave us yet, and he was staring directly into my eyes as if he was trying to tell me something. I held his hands as tightly as I possibly could and prayed. My mom and aunties also got to the bedroom, but his spasms were gone by the time they arrived. The monitor returned back to normal, and his breathing slowed down. My mother, then, let out a loud sigh of relief and in her tear-filled eyes, I could tell how terrified she was. Around 6 am, my grandma came along with the doctors. The doctor did the procedural treatments and injected some morphine to ease my father’s pain. We sat in the room for a whole morning, and the monitor’s alert went off numerous times. “The condition seemed to have aggravated. ” The doctor said emotionlessly. “His blood pressure is too low, and we can only maintain his life using medicine and nutrition fluids. ” My heart ached in tremendous pain, but I knew what it meant. Before I knew it, my grandma went down to the kitchen, and she had brought a bowl of Chinese herbal, medicinal fluids “Son, take a sip, this will make you feel better. ” My dad hasn’t eaten anything in the last three days because he vomited everything that went down his throat. The medicine was made from different types of grass and leaves, it had an extremely bitter taste to it, and it smelled like rotten meats. Undoubtedly, I knew my dad would suffer more if he drank it. “Leave him alone! ” I ran inside and yelled at my grandma. “If he doesn’t drink anything, how will he recover? ” My grandma shouted back and continued to urge my father to take a sip. Finally, I snatched the bowl of medicine from her hands and dropped it on the floor. “Leave! ” I said angrily. Looking shocked, my grandma left the room. Everyone was overwhelmed by my reaction to my grandma, including my dad. In their eyes, I was always a good, courteous kid who respected elders, and my unexpected reaction took everyone by surprise. “ I want to talk with you, Dandan, ” My dad whispered feebly, and those were the first words to come out of my father’s mouth in days. Knowing my father wanted to have a private conversation with me, my uncles and aunts stepped out of the room. “Dandan” was the Chinese nickname that my dad called me by when he was healthy. When he was healthy, he would also most certainly criticize me and punish me for disrespecting my grandmother. “You aren’t a child anymore, you have to learn to be more mature, ” my dad started gently. I nodded, “I will still be looking after you, just a different place, so promise to look after our family. ” my dad continued. “But where? ” I cried because I couldn’t hold back my tears. “I will be one of the stars, watching you high up in the sky. ” “There are so many of them, you are going to get better! ” I hiccuped in response and continued to let my tears stream down my face. “Dandan, sometimes, life won’t go as you planned, but you can make the best out of it, ” and he continued, “I will be the brightest one”. Then, the doctor came in to do an hourly check-in and I didn’t get the chance to answer my dad. I went downstairs to apologize to my grandma and told her I understood her feelings. She comforted me and said, “both of us were driven by our nerves. ” It was then when I heard the monitor’s incessant beeping sound again filled the entire house. We all charged back into my dad’s room to see the unconscious body of my father, lying helplessly in his bed. “The patient is unconscious right now. ”, the doctor declared, and everything became a blur after that. I remember holding on to his hands firmly while the alarm kept going off. The alert was ringing for ten minutes straight when it stopped suddenly, and my father opened his eyes to get a final look at every one. He, then, focused on the sky outside of the window, took a look at the world for the last time. “Beep…” this time, his heartbeat flattened, and the doctor announced his time of death. It felt as though my world was falling apart. After what seemed like hours of silence crying in my bed, I fell asleep. When I woke up, the world was covered in blackness. In the sky, there still weren't any clouds, the starlights were still dim, and I couldn’t stop but feel disappointed. But just when I was about to close my eyes again, I caught a glimpse of something shining in the sky: it was the brightest star that my father was talking about. I knew it was far away, yet it felt so close. I don't know if it was my tears or the stars, but it was shining so brightly. I stared at the star for as long as I can remember, and I knew my father would always be right there, looking after everything

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. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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 stared at the star for as long as I can remember, and I You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnoticerecognizeappreciateperceiveexperiencesee
knew
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
 would always be right there, looking after Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragrapheverything.everything!everything?everything:everything,everything;
everything