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The best way to support homeless people is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

The best way to support homeless people is to give them money. qVaOE
Money is a fundamental part of life, but when it comes to homeless individuals, it's an absolute necessity. Therefore, some people believe that financial support should provide for homeless people. I'm afraid I have to disagree with that statement because giving cash to homeless people will have some immediate, short, and long-term adverse effects like laziness and dependency and can instill some negative habits. Initially, easy financial assistance can make people lazy, and getting funds will stop them from searching for work and shelter, which can lead to a sedentary life. After getting cash, instead of finding a place to live, they stay on the street. As a result, a person may get into specific health problems like obesity and many other infections. According to a survey report, over 25% of homeless people are regularly coming to a Seattle general hospital with different types of infections every month. People become dependent on those payments, which they are getting with minimum or no effort, which will lead to a lack of motivation to search for a place to live. Eventually, people will not do anything to improve their living standards and start queuing up for the benefits: Consequetly, this distribution of fund with burdens on the tax payer's shoulders and the government coffers. For example, statistics show, in the last few years, one reason to increase the general taxes is the number of homeless people has increased at the Washington streets. In the long run, the person can indulge in bad habits instead of using that money to search for their home. Therefore, without working, getting money fairly quickly will possibly be getting into bad habits like drug addiction, batting, or gambling. A research report illustrates that around 30% of people residing on the street, despite getting government assistance caught up by the police from one community in Nigeria. In conclusion, I believe any monetary assistance will not help homeless people but will provide some drawbacks and make them lazy, dependent, and sometimes criminal.
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individuals, it's an absolute necessity.
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some
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people
believe that financial support should provide for
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homeless
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. I'm afraid I
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have to
disagree with that statement
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because
giving cash to
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homeless
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people
will have
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some
immediate, short, and long-term adverse effects like laziness and dependency and can instill
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some
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negative
habits.

Initially
, easy financial assistance can
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make
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people
lazy, and getting funds will
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stop
them from searching for work and shelter, which can lead to a sedentary life. After getting cash,
instead
of finding a place to
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live
, they stay on the street.
As a result
, a person may
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get
into specific health problems like obesity and
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many
other infections. According to a survey report, over 25% of
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homeless
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people
are
regularly
coming to a Seattle general hospital with
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different
types of infections every month.

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People
become dependent on those payments, which they are getting with minimum or no effort, which will lead to a lack of motivation to search for a place to
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live
.
Eventually
,
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people
will not do anything to
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improve
their living standards and
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start
queuing up for the benefits:
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Consequetly
, this distribution of fund with burdens on the tax payer's shoulders and the
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government
coffers.
For example
, statistics
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show
, in the last few years, one reason to increase the general taxes is the number of
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homeless
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
has increased at the Washington streets.

In the long run, the person can indulge in
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bad
habits
instead
of using that money to search for their home.
Therefore
, without working, getting money
fairly
quickly
will
possibly
be getting into
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bad
habits like drug addiction, batting, or gambling. A research report illustrates that around 30% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
residing on the street, despite getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
assistance caught up by the police from one community in Nigeria.

In conclusion
, I believe any monetary assistance will not
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help
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homeless
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people
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but
will provide
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some
drawbacks and
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make
them lazy, dependent, and
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sometimes
criminal.
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IELTS essay The best way to support homeless people is to give them money.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
333 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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