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In many countries traditional customs are lost. Why is this happening. What school and parents can do to keep it alive.

In many countries traditional customs are lost. Why is this happening. What school and parents can do to keep it alive. 3a0Jl
It has become a big concern for many nations, as their original customs are getting vanished. There are various reasons behind this. However, schools and our guardians can play a major role to preserve this. This essay will discuss both causes and solutions of it, in the below essay. There are two major causes of this situation. The first and the most prevailing one is globalization, which has resulted in interference of different cultures. As people are now able to freely move across the world, which helps them to learn and comprehend about different people following different ritual. Knowing others can be new and exciting for some and they start finding their own customs boring and orthodox. Owing to this reason, they start adapting this new traditions, by losing their own. The other reason is lack of awareness of their own traditional practices. Take holidays for an instance, these are normally given to celebrate festivals, so that the youngster’s can learn these extremely important customs. However, with the advanced technology and the evolution of transportation have made possible for many people to spend their vacations in different parts of the world. This can prevent children from learning it, which can eventually destroy it from its roots. The above courses can be mitigated if parents and education system come forward to save it. Firstly, schools can give deeper comprehending about the past. As schools are the one from where children can learn the basic fundaments about the past history. Therefore, if schools teach the young ones how it first started, and why it is essential to preserve it, then children will be motivated and can have a brief understanding about it. Secondly, children act and learn, what they see from their parents. A study has shown that India is known to be rich in its cultural beliefs. As they love to celebrate it with their families with great enthusiasm, which eventually helps the future generation to keep it intact. Consequently, it will be well preserved. To conclude, though there are a number of reasons behind this situation, but it can be alleviated if school starts providing information about its importance, and parents come forward by setting their own examples by celebrating it with their kids. Therefore, it is strongly recommended that steps should be taken by both to conserve the utterly important traditions of their own country.
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concern for
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nations, as their original customs are getting vanished. There are various
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reasons
behind this.
However
,
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schools
and our guardians can play a major role to preserve this. This essay will discuss both causes and solutions of it, in the below essay.

There are two major causes of this situation. The
first
and the most prevailing one is globalization, which has resulted in interference of
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different
cultures. As
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people
are
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now
able to
freely
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move
across the world, which
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helps
them to
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learn
and comprehend about
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different
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people
following
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different
ritual. Knowing others can be new and exciting for
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some and
they
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start
finding their
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own
customs boring and orthodox. Owing to this
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reason
, they
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start
adapting this new traditions, by losing their
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own
. The other
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reason
is lack of awareness of their
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own
traditional practices. Take holidays for an instance, these are
normally
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given
to celebrate festivals,
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so
that the youngster’s can
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learn
these
extremely
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important
customs.
However
, with the advanced technology and the evolution of transportation have made possible for
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many
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people
to spend their vacations in
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different
parts of the world. This can
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prevent
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children
from learning it, which can
eventually
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destroy
it from its roots.

The above courses can
be mitigated
if parents and education system
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come
forward to save it.
Firstly
,
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schools
can give deeper comprehending about the past.
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As
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schools
are the one from where
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children
can
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learn
the basic fundaments about the past history.
Therefore
, if
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schools
teach the young ones how it
first
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started
, and why it is essential to preserve it, then
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children
will
be motivated
and can have a brief understanding about it.
Secondly
,
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children
act and
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learn
, what they
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see
from their parents. A study has shown that India
is known
to be rich in its cultural beliefs. As they
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love
to celebrate it with their families with great enthusiasm, which
eventually
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helps
the future generation to
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keep
it intact.
Consequently
, it will be
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well preserved
.

To conclude
, though there are a number of
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reasons
behind this situation,
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but
it can
be alleviated
if
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school
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starts
providing information about its importance, and parents
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come
forward by setting their
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own
examples by celebrating it with their kids.
Therefore
, it is
strongly
recommended that steps should
be taken
by both to conserve the
utterly
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important
traditions of their
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own
country.
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IELTS essay In many countries traditional customs are lost. Why is this happening. What school and parents can do to keep it alive.

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