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The article states about some theories toward the noises that Russian submarines have heard occasionally in 1960s and continuing until 1980s at North Atlantic and Arctic Ocean.

The article states about some theories toward the noises that Russian submarines have heard occasionally in 1960s and continuing until 1980s at North Atlantic and Arctic Ocean. 0ABdn
The article states about some theories toward the noises that Russian submarines have heard occasionally in 1960s and continuing until 1980s at North Atlantic and Arctic Ocean. The article also provides three possibilities to illustrate this phenomenon. However, the professor in the lecture casts serious doubt on the passage by using a number of points that are contrary to each of the author's reasons. First of all, the reading claims that there is a possibility that these noises are related to male and female ocra whales during a courtship. In contrast, the professor refutes this point by saying that it was plausible at first but it not really true. He mentions that ocra whales do their courtships in the surface. However, the submarine's sonar technology generally has used in deep ocean not surface. On another hand, the article posits that these noises may be caused by giant squids. However, the teacher describes that it so not believable because Russian submarines found these noises at 1960 and sounds continue until today. According to the professor these noises not suddenly start or finish. Finally, the article makes it clear that some people argue that these noises are related to other countries submarines. Conversely, the lecturer opposes this point by explaining that is not about other submarines due to the fact that noises change in direction that is not about submarines. We also find that technology provides a lot of improvements in submarines' engines that they do not make any noises.
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states about
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some
theories toward the
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noises
that Russian
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submarines
have heard
occasionally
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in 1960s
and continuing until 1980s at North Atlantic and Arctic Ocean. The
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article
also
provides three possibilities to illustrate this phenomenon.
However
, the professor in the lecture casts serious doubt on the passage by using a number of points that are contrary to each of the author's reasons.

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First of all
, the reading claims that there is a possibility that these
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noises
are related
to male and female
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ocra
whales during a courtship.
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, the professor refutes this point by saying that it was plausible at
first
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but
it not
really
true. He mentions that
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ocra
whales do their courtships in the surface.
However
, the submarine's sonar technology
generally
has
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used
in deep ocean not surface.

On another hand, the
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article
posits that these
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noises
may
be caused
by giant squids.
However
, the teacher
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describes
that it
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so
not believable
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because
Russian
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submarines
found these
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noises
at 1960 and sounds continue until
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today
. According to the professor these
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noises
not
suddenly
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start
or finish.

Finally
, the
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it
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clear
that
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some
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people
argue that these
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noises
are related
to other countries
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submarines
.
Conversely
, the lecturer opposes this point by explaining
that is
not about other
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submarines
due to the fact that
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noises
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change
in direction
that is
not about
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submarines
. We
also
find that technology provides
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a lot of
improvements in submarines' engines that they do not
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make
any
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noises
.
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IELTS essay The article states about some theories toward the noises that Russian submarines have heard occasionally in 1960s and continuing until 1980s at North Atlantic and Arctic Ocean.

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248 words
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