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The article presents cases of former US counterintelligence officers, who suffer from a rare case of Parkinson’s disease. Their symptoms appeared years ago, while they were on a mission in foreign countries (for example Cuba or Russia

The article presents cases of former US counterintelligence officers, who suffer from a rare case of Parkinson’s disease. Their symptoms appeared years ago, while they were on a mission in foreign countries (for example Cuba or Russia qVdA5
The article presents cases of former US counterintelligence officers, who suffer from a rare case of Parkinson’s disease. Their symptoms appeared years ago, while they were on a mission in foreign countries (for example Cuba or Russia) but the official report came out only recently. It turned out that the victims were exposed for excessive amounts of radio frequency energy. Even though officers complained about their health issues many times, NSA ignored the problem.
The article presents cases of former US counterintelligence officers, who suffer from a rare case of Parkinson’s disease. Their symptoms appeared years ago, while they were on a mission in foreign countries (
for example
Cuba or Russia)
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the official report came out
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
recently. It turned out that the victims
were exposed
for excessive amounts of radio frequency energy.
Even though
officers complained about their health issues
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many
times, NSA
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
the problem.

IELTS essay The article presents cases of former US counterintelligence officers, who suffer from a rare case of Parkinson’s disease. Their symptoms appeared years ago, while they were on a mission in foreign countries (for example Cuba or Russia

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