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the animal species are becoming extinct due to humans activities on land and in sea . What are the reasons and solutions?

the animal species are becoming extinct due to humans activities on land and in sea. What are the reasons and solutions? DOj7

It is true that since few years, wildlife and aquatic life are being destroyed, due to this wide range of species are disappear. There are several reasons behind this and also solutions to protect animals. This essay will discuss why this happening and put solution for this issue. To commence with, there are two main causes why animals are disappearing. First and foremost, in many countries trees are being cut down in order to farmland on which grow crops and keep farming animals as well as for construct the industrial area. Secondly, overfishing is also responsible for the extinct of sea animal. Fishermen take profits from the fishes to sale them the purpose of eat because sea food is become popular at present. Moving further, despite issues, there are certain solution to reduce it to great extent. Firstly, if people cut down trees for the needs, then they should have to plant more trees, due to this forest area more likely to spread into large area. It will be beneficial to save the wild animals. Another that, government should use high technology for the buildings which are spawned in large area of the earth. These will be spread in small area so that, these would not consume longer area. To conclude, although having a human activities including farming and fishing are negative impacts on the species of animals, government and individual can secure the animals.

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destroyed
, due to this wide range of species are Consider using a past participle here: "disappeared".disappeared
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. There are several reasons behind this and also
 solutions to protect You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
. This essay will discuss why this happening and put solution for this issue.

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animals
 are disappearing. First
 and foremost, in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
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cut
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keep
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animals
as well
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area
. Secondly
, overfishing is also
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animal
. Fishermen take profits from the fishes to sale them the purpose of eat This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
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Moving further
, despite issues, there are certain solution to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviate
reduce
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, if This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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cut
 down trees for the needs, then they should This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 plant more trees, due to this forest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 more likely to spread into large You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
. It will be beneficial to save the wild You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
. Another that, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 high technology for the buildings which are spawned
 in large You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 of the earth. These will be spread
 in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
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area
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that, these would not consume longer area.

To conclude
, although having a human Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "activity"?activity
activities
 including farming and fishing are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 impacts on the species of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 and individual can secure the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
. 