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The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer. v.2

The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer. v. 2
Man, through the ages, has undergone many changes from the time when he depicted a herd of mammoths on the walls of his cave to these days when he can create beautiful pictures and even make coffee by use of computer technologies without leaving his favorite chair. The 20th century made huge steps in developing computer technologies and reached many goals that made our life much easier. What should we expect in the 21st century? First of all, I think that the pace of our life will speed up: we will move faster from one place to another, from one continent to another using high speed jet airplanes. Second of all, I believe that we will be able to do many things that take much time now without leaving our house. Computers will be everywhere including out clothes. Many people will have chips and mini computers inserted in their heads to hold huge amount of information and have a quick access to it. But what will be the most amazing thing in the 21st century is the flights to the outer space and Mars that will be available to all people. Scientists say that Mars has many things similar to the Earth's. Moreover, they say that with the help of modern technology people can artificially create conditions that will allow people to live there on the constant basis. To sum up, I am sure that many amazing changes will be brought by the 21st century. Furthermore, I think that with the help of the contemporary technologies people can do many things that were even difficult to imagine a century ago. So, nowadays it is rather difficult and even impossible to imagine all changes that will happen in the next decades.
Man
, through the ages, has undergone
many
changes
from the time when he depicted a herd of mammoths on the walls of his cave to these days when he can create
beautiful
pictures and even
make
coffee by
use
of computer
technologies
without leaving his favorite chair. The 20th century made huge steps in developing computer
technologies
and reached
many
goals that made our life much easier. What should we
expect
in the 21st century?

First of all
, I
think
that the pace of our life will
speed up
: we will
move
faster from one place to another, from one continent to another using high speed jet airplanes. Second of all, I believe that we will be able to do
many
things that take much time
now
without leaving our
house
. Computers will be everywhere including out clothes.
Many
people
will have chips and mini computers inserted in their heads to hold huge amount of information and have
a quick access
to it.

But
what will be the most amazing thing in the 21st century is the flights to the outer space and Mars that will be available to all
people
. Scientists say that Mars has
many
things similar to the Earth's.
Moreover
, they say that with the
help
of modern
technology
people
can
artificially
create conditions that will
allow
people
to
live
there on the constant basis.

To sum up, I am sure that
many
amazing
changes
will
be brought
by the 21st century.
Furthermore
, I
think
that with the
help
of the contemporary
technologies
people
can do
many
things that were even difficult to imagine a century ago.
So
, nowadays it is
rather
difficult and even impossible to imagine all
changes
that will happen in the
next
decades.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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