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The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer v.14

The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer v. 14
Man, through the ages, has undergone many changes from the time when he depicted a herd of mammoths on the walls of his cave to these days when he can create beautiful pictures and even make coffee by use of computer technologies without leaving his favorite chair. The 20th century made huge steps in developing computer technologies and reached many goals that made our life much easier. What should we expect in the 21st century? First of all, I think that the pace of our life will speed up: we will move faster from one place to another, from one continent to another using high speed jet airplanes. Second of all, I believe that we will be able to do many things that take much time now without leaving our house. Computers will be everywhere including out clothes. Many people will have chips and mini computers inserted in their heads to hold huge amount of information and have a quick access to it. But what will be the most amazing thing in the 21st century is the flights to the outer space and Mars that will be available to all people. Scientists say that Mars has many things similar to the Earth' s. Moreover, they say that with the help of modern technology people can artificially create conditions that will allow people to live there on the constant basis. To sum up, I am sure that many amazing changes will be brought by the 21st century. Furthermore, I think that with the help of the contemporary technologies people can do many things that were even difficult to imagine a century ago. So, nowadays it is rather difficult and even impossible to imagine all changes that will happen in the next decades.
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, through the ages, has undergone
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many
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changes
from the time when he depicted a herd of mammoths on the walls of his cave to these days

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when
he can create
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beautiful
pictures and even
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make
coffee by
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use
of computer technologies without leaving his favorite chair. The 20th
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century


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made
huge steps in developing computer technologies and reached
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many
goals that made our life much easier. What should we
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expect
in the 21st

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century
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, I
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think
that the pace of our life will
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speed up
: we will
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move
faster from one place to another, from one continent to another using high

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speed
jet airplanes. Second of all, I believe that we will be able to do
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many
things that take much time
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now
without leaving our
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house
. Computers

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will
be everywhere including out clothes.
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people
will have chips and mini computers inserted in their heads to hold huge amount
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of


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information
and have
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a quick access
to it.

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what will be the most amazing thing in the 21st century is the flights to the outer space and Mars that will be available to all
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people
. Scientists

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say
that Mars has
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things similar to the
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, they say that with the
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help
of modern technology
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people
can
artificially
create

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conditions
that will
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allow
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people
to
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live
there on the constant basis.

To sum up, I am sure that
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amazing
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will
be brought
by the 21st century.
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, I
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think
that with the
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help
of the contemporary

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technologies
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people
can do
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many
things that were even difficult to imagine a century ago.
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rather
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imagine
all
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changes
that will happen in the
next
decades.
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15Mistakes

IELTS essay The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer v. 14

Essay
  American English
14 paragraphs
291 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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