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Do you agree or disagree with the statement that increasing teacher's salary is the best way to improve the education quality.

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Although teacher is regarded as a respectable career, hardly do they receive any decent pay. Because of that, few teachers have passion in teaching and thus the education quality is badly affected. To turn this situation around, some people argue that increasing teacher's salary could be the best way. However, I could hardly agree with them. In my opinion, increasing teacher's salary is a must but still far from enough and I would explore some primary ones here. First of all, there is no denying the fact that teacher's salary plays a necessary role in education quality. As a saying goes, " if you want to buy some commodities, try to ask for a discount. But if you want to buy some service, then pay more than they asked for. " In my perspective, the relationship between the students and the teachers is the same as that between the buyers and the sellers. Imagine if sellers receive more than expected, then they will be motivated and encouraged to improve their products. Also, the same goes for teachers. It is general the truth that teachers are paid for their knowledge. In terms of them, knowledge is their product, and students are their clients. Once they gain more than expected, they feel sense of self-worth and recognized. In return, greater efforts would be made in teaching and thus education quality could be increase. Therefore, we have to admit that increasing teacher’s salary is a good idea. However, it's just a part of the picture. Something else should be also taken into consideration. As far as I am concerned, those people who insist on teacher’s salary fail to mention the root cause of the decrease in education quality. First of all, due to the enrollment expansion, new freshmen face a brutally tight education resource. Since the higher education is starved of classrooms, textbooks and teaching equipment, students have less access to advanced technology. As a result, student nowadays are no more as knowledgeable as the people before. Besides, students, especially in China, are too overloading. They have to take so many courses which are unnecessary. For example, students major in Finance have to take physics course, while the students major in physics have to take literature course. Undoubtedly, such curriculum arrangement wastes students’ time and energy so that they can't focus on their major, let alone make any contribution in their field. To draw a conclusion, only increasing the teacher's salary is not enough. Both the government and schools are required to work together to find out the best way.
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teacher
is regarded
as a respectable career, hardly do they receive any decent pay.
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Because
of that, few
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teachers
have passion in teaching and
thus
the
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education
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quality
is
badly
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affected
. To turn this situation around,
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some
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people
argue that
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increasing
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teacher's
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salary
could be the best way.
However
, I could hardly
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agree
with them. In my opinion,
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increasing
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teacher's
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salary
is a
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must
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but
still
far from
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enough
and I would explore
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some
primary ones here.

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First of all
, there is no denying the fact that
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teacher's
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salary
plays a necessary role in
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education
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quality
. As a saying goes,
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; if you want to
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buy
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some
commodities, try to
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ask for
a discount.
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But
if you want to
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buy
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some
service, then pay more than they
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asked for
.
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; In my perspective, the relationship between the
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students
and the
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teachers
is the same as that between the buyers and the sellers. Imagine if sellers receive more than
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expected
, then they will
be motivated
and encouraged to
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improve
their products.
Also
, the same goes for
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teachers
. It is general the truth that
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teachers
are paid
for their knowledge. In terms of them, knowledge is their product, and
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students
are their clients. Once they gain more than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
, they feel sense of self-worth and recognized. In return, greater efforts would
be made
in teaching and
thus
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education
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quality
could be increase.
Therefore
, we
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have to
admit that
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increasing
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teacher’s
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salary
is a
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good
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idea
.

However
, it's
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just
a part of the picture. Something else should be
also
taken into consideration. As far as I
am concerned
, those
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people
who insist on
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teacher’s
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salary
fail to mention the root cause of the decrease in
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education
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, due to the enrollment expansion, new freshmen face a
brutally
tight
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education
resource. Since the higher
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education
is starved
of classrooms, textbooks and teaching equipment,
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students
have less access to advanced technology.
As a result
,
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student
nowadays are no more
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
knowledgeable as the
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people
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before
.
Besides
,
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students
,
especially
in China, are too overloading. They
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have to
take
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so
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many
courses which are unnecessary.
For example
,
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students
major in Finance
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have to
take physics course, while the
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students
major in physics
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have to
take literature course.
Undoubtedly
, such curriculum arrangement wastes
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students’
time and energy
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so
that they can't focus on their major,
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let
alone
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make
any contribution in their field.

To draw a conclusion,
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only
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increasing
the
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teacher's
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salary
is not
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enough
. Both the
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government
and schools
are required
to work together to find out the best way.
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IELTS essay that increasing teacher's salary is the best way to improve the education quality.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
427 words
6.0
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