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Do you agree or disagree with the statement that people can make friends with guy who has more money.

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Money has never appealed to me. City born and city bred, I always regard friendship as something that can't be measured by money. The reason why people insist on making friend with guy who has more money is beyond me. It’s unadvisable to do that from my points of view and I would explore only two primary ones to support myself here. First of all, it is a general truth that the principle of people making friends should be based on mutual understandings rather than money. If you can do without the few pleasures that money brings you, you will find the real friends provide you the best that. . .
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has never appealed to me. City born and city bred, I always regard friendship as something that can't
be measured
by
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. The reason why
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people
insist on making friend with guy who has more
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is beyond me. It’s unadvisable to do that from my points of view and I would explore
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only
two primary ones to support myself here.

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First of all
, it is a general truth that the principle of
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people
making friends should
be based
on mutual understandings
rather
than
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money
. If you can do without the few pleasures that
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money
brings you, you will find the real friends provide you the best that.
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IELTS essay that people can make friends with guy who has more money.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
111 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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