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Thanksgiving Day in Canada

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October 11 is the Thanksgiving Day of Canada everyone is having a Turkey for a dinner! Some of them go to the grocery store before Thanksgiving day they're gonna catch the biggest Turkey that they will see. Otherwise some of them just go to their friends house to do and share celebration with them. Thanksgiving day is special day for Canada there's a lot to be thankful for all what we receive and what we have now especially thanking our Lord for giving us all the blessings we had now.
October 11 is the Thanksgiving Day of Canada everyone is having a Turkey for a dinner!
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to do and share celebration with them.
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Thanksgiving day
is special day for Canada there's a lot to be thankful for all what we receive and what we have
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thanking our Lord for giving us all the blessings we had
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IELTS essay Thanksgiving Day in Canada

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
90 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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