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The advent of technology triggered the rapid development of the Internet that, for many, has opened doors to unlimited sources of data. However, the flow of information is irrepressible, meaning that most people cannot cope with as much as they have to. Eventually, it can lead to various problems, some of which will be discussed in this essay. Memory loss is one of the typical consequences of indiscriminate internet usage. It happens since our brain, metaphorically speaking, is nothing but a chest of drawers. We can store as many facts as we desire there until one day there is no more space. When this happens, we start clattering them up, hoping that it will solve the problem; and it does, yet temporarily. Then we start forgetting. We rely on our short-term memory, rather than our long-term memory, undermining its overriding importance. For example, instead of memorising one’s address, we would rather put it into our organiser; instead of trying to remember some historical facts, we tend to google it. As a result, our old memories, our experience, and our knowledge fade because they become nothing but redundant. Another widespread problem caused by the World Wide Web is our inability to think critically. Being bombarded by gigabytes of data, we cannot distinguish between reliable and nonreliable sources of information. According to statistics, one never clicks on the second page on Google Search, choosing from the first three to five links. Some websites, though being universally criticised (e. g. Wikipedia, ) are still considered the most trustworthy encyclopedias. The secret of their success lies in their user-friendly layout. Everything we need is usually carefully selected and sometimes even highlighted. This does not give us a real insight into the matter, nor does it bring any deep understanding, but most of the time, we do not seek more. We are satisfied with the result, and we do not tend to check whether the found information was false. In conclusion, the Internet inarguably sometimes affects our lives negatively, influencing our memory capacity and reasoning skills. I think to reduce the hazardous effect of cyberspace reasonably we need to use it sensibly: depending on our memory, not a gadget and double-checking the information, found online, in the long run, will undoubtedly stand us in good stead.
The advent of technology triggered the rapid development of the Internet that, for
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many
, has opened doors to unlimited sources of data.
However
, the flow of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
is irrepressible, meaning that most
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
cannot cope with as much as they
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have to
.
Eventually
, it can lead to various problems,
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some
of which will
be discussed
in this essay.

Memory loss is one of the typical consequences of indiscriminate internet usage. It happens since our brain,
metaphorically
speaking, is nothing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
a chest of drawers. We can store as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
facts as we desire there until one day there is no more space. When this happens, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
clattering them up, hoping that it will solve the problem; and it does,
yet
temporarily
. Then we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
forgetting. We rely on our short-term
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
memory
,
rather
than our long-term
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
memory
, undermining its overriding importance.
For example
,
instead
of
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memorising
one’s address, we would
rather
put it into our
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organiser
;
instead
of trying to remember
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
historical facts, we tend to google it.
As a result
, our
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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memories
, our experience, and our knowledge fade
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because
they become nothing
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but
redundant.

Another widespread problem caused by the World Wide Web is our inability to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
critically
.
Being bombarded
by gigabytes of data, we cannot distinguish between reliable and
Possible spelling mistake found.
nonreliable
sources of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
. According to statistics, one never clicks on the second page on Google Search, choosing from the
first
three to five links.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
websites, though being
universally
Possible spelling mistake. 'criticised' is British English.
criticised
(
There should be no space here: "e.g.".
e. g.
Wikipedia,
Don't put a space before the closing parenthesis
)
are
still
considered the most trustworthy encyclopedias. The secret of their success lies in their user-friendly layout. Everything we need is
usually
carefully
selected and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
even highlighted. This does not give us a real insight into the matter, nor does it bring any deep understanding,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
most of the time, we do not seek more. We
are satisfied
with the result, and we do not tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
whether the found
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
was false.

In conclusion
, the Internet
inarguably
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sometimes
affects our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
negatively
, influencing our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
memory
capacity and reasoning
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skills
. I
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think
to
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reduce
the hazardous effect of cyberspace
reasonably
we need to
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use
it
sensibly
: depending on our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
memory
, not a gadget and double-checking the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, found online, in the long run, will
undoubtedly
stand us in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
stead.
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IELTS essay test of internet in mordern world

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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