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Tell me a personal story about aliens.

Tell me a personal story about aliens. e3aKO
If I will see some aliens out my car, I would get out of control to, may be some people don’t be prepare to see so close to the aliens. Long story short, in some place in Valencia in 2009, I was hiking the mountains with my friend at night, we could see a strange light in the sky, that light was slowly down, so We got impressed about it. Suddenly the light was stopped long time in the same place without move. Therefore, we were amazed of we were seeing, we wanted to arrive top of the mountain very fast, because we thought that was a dream, but all group were seeing the same. Finally, when we arrived top of the mountain, the light disappears, we never got afraid, we wanted to see more and more, but we couldn`t see, that night all group had a fantastic experience.
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close to the aliens.

Long story short, in
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place in Valencia in 2009, I was hiking the mountains with my friend at night, we could
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see
a strange
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in the sky, that
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was
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down,
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We
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impressed about it.
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stopped
long time in the same place without
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Therefore
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,
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that was a dream,
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all group were seeing the same.

Finally
, when we arrived top of the mountain, the
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disappears, we never
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afraid, we wanted to
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more and more,
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, that night all group had a fantastic experience.
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IELTS essay Tell me a personal story about aliens.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
149 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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