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Television is now widespread in all communities as almost everyone has access to this medium on daily basis however the effect of television are not always positive

Television is now widespread in all communities as almost everyone has access to this medium on daily basis however the effect of television are not always positive 5AQlA
Technology is advancing with leaks and bounds. It has revolutionized each and every aspect of life television gain more popularity. In my further writing I am going to describe some negative consequences of watching television excessively and remides to curb it's ill effects To begin with television is a slow poison which lead devasting effects and encourage children towards devasting. Apart from this children become less productive its addiction is quite common to notice widening gap between children and parents. Moreover children become more lethargic they do not focus on there studies also programmes which are broadcasting through television encourage children towards aggressive behaviour. Taking a account of remedies key solutions is parental guidance parents should encourage their children to stay connected with their studies also to perform outdoor activities to enhanced their knowledge. Beside this there should be restrictions on aggressive programs. moreover government should broadcast cultural based programmes to enhanced knowledge. In conclusion it will be wise to say that television is not that bad how people make it the way they watch the need is to watch it wisely not blindly
Technology is advancing with leaks and bounds. It has revolutionized each and every aspect of life
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television
gain more popularity. In my
further
writing I am going to
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describe
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negative
consequences of watching
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television
excessively
and
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remides
to curb
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it's
ill
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effects


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with
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television
is a slow poison which lead
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devasting
effects and encourage
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children
towards
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devasting
. Apart from
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this
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children
become less productive its addiction is quite common to notice widening gap between
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children
and parents.
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children
become more lethargic they do not focus on
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studies
also
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programmes
which are broadcasting through
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television
encourage
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children
towards aggressive
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behaviour
.

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a
account of remedies key solutions is parental guidance parents should encourage their
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children
to stay connected with their studies
also
to perform outdoor activities to enhanced their knowledge. Beside this there should be restrictions on aggressive programs.
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moreover
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government
should broadcast cultural based
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programmes
to enhanced knowledge.

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will be wise to say that
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television
is not that
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bad
how
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people
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make
it the way they
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watch
the need is to
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watch
it
wisely
not
blindly

IELTS essay Television is now widespread in all communities as almost everyone has access to this medium on daily basis however the effect of television are not always positive

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
183 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.0
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