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Society is based on rules and laws. It could not functionif individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. To what extent do youagree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Society is based on rules and laws. It could not functionif individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience KWaE6
A code of conduct is significant for people to behave and maintaint the propriety. I strongly agree that rules and regulations are crucial for a community to operate otherwise people can depict wrong behaviour. To begin with, there are many reasons laws need to exist for people. First of all, they acts a guideline in that what will be accepted by the social groups. If they won’t exist, it will lead to conflicts between communities and further differences. For instance, recently a news showed that a family in Dilshad Garden, New Delhi had a physical fight over a music system that was played after the allowed time by the law. Furthermore, It creates the required level of fear of punishment by the court in the minds of people. Fear is the only thing which keeps away a person from performing wrong activities. Rules and regulations ensures that there are no form of abuses and makes people safe. To conclude, rules and regulations makes the a better place and allowing people to freedom to do anything will be a risk of conflicts and safety.
A code of conduct is significant for
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people
to behave and
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maintaint
the propriety. I
strongly
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agree
that
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rules
and regulations are crucial for a community to operate
otherwise
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people
can depict
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wrong
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behaviour
.

To
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begin
with, there are
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many
reasons laws need to exist for
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people
.
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First of all
, they
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acts
a guideline in that what will be
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accepted
by the social groups. If they won’t exist, it will lead to conflicts between communities and
further
differences.
For instance
, recently
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a news
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showed
that a family in
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Dilshad
Garden, New Delhi had a physical fight over a music system that
was played
after the
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allowed
time by the law.

Furthermore
, It creates the required level of fear of punishment by the court in the minds of
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people
. Fear is the
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only
thing which
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keeps
away a person from performing
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wrong
activities.
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Rules
and regulations ensures that there are no form of abuses and
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makes
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people
safe.

To conclude
,
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rules
and regulations
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makes
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the a
better place and allowing
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people
to freedom to do anything will be a
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risk
of conflicts and safety.
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IELTS essay Society is based on rules and laws. It could not functionif individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
183 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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