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Television injects violence in children, and programs with violent scenes should be banned. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Television injects violence in children, and programs with violent scenes should be banned. Q3Xb
The modern television shows are equipped with violent content and they immensely influence the young minds. It is strongly believed by various sections of society that such scenes should be censored from being broadcast. I too, support this notion. Relevant reasons to prove this fact are discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs with illustrations. The first point worth mentioning is that imposing censorship on violent television shows will prevent the young ones from developing a sense of aggressiveness. It has usually been seen that children can be easily moulded towards anything they watch because they are avid audience. They do not posses the capability to distinguish right from wrong. To illustrate, in a recent survey done by the social welfare development in the US, it was observed that out of all cares of juvenile delinquency, more than half of them confessed that they imitated the violent acts displayed on the silver screen. Thus, a ban on such actions is needed. To continue, in modern societies both the parents are working. Thus their children are usually left alone after school hours. During this time, they have the full liberty to watch anything they want without any proper guidance in the absence of their elders, there are more chances that they will be watching violent broadcasts regularly. Gradually, it will have detrimental impact on them. hence, if there dangerous television shows are banned, the parents will bother less for their young ones. Having illustrated all the related points. I am of the opinion that it would be a wise decision to cut off the violent scenes because they negative impact on children's.
The modern television
shows
are equipped
with
violent
content and
they
immensely
influence the young minds. It is
strongly
believed by various sections of society that such scenes should
be censored
from being broadcast. I too, support this notion. Relevant reasons to prove this fact
are discussed
in the forthcoming paragraphs with illustrations.

The
first
point worth mentioning is that imposing censorship on
violent
television
shows
will
prevent
the young ones from developing a sense of aggressiveness. It has
usually
been
seen
that children can be
easily
moulded
towards anything they
watch
because
they
are avid
audience. They do not posses the capability to distinguish right from
wrong
. To illustrate, in a recent survey done by the social welfare development in the US, it
was observed
that out of all cares of juvenile delinquency, more than half of them confessed that they imitated the
violent
acts displayed on the silver screen.
Thus
, a ban on such actions
is needed
.

To continue, in modern societies both the parents are working.
Thus
their children are
usually
left
alone after school hours. During this time, they have the full liberty to
watch
anything they want without any proper guidance in the absence of their elders, there are more chances that they will be watching
violent
broadcasts
regularly
.
Gradually
, it will have detrimental impact on them.
hence
, if there
dangerous
television
shows
are banned
, the parents will bother less for their young ones.

Having illustrated all the related points. I am of the opinion that it would be a wise decision to
cut
off the
violent
scenes
because
they
negative
impact on children's.
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IELTS essay Television injects violence in children, and programs with violent scenes should be banned.

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269 words
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