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Television has had a tremendous influence on its viewers

Television has had a tremendous influence on its viewers Nybrd
All in all, besides watching TV can help us entertain and relax after a tiring day of studying or working, we can be adversely affected if we watch TV constantly, especially children. They will not only become more and more sendentary, less effective at learning, but their feelings will also be negatively affected to the outside world. Instead of spending time sitting in front of the screens, we should take part in more rewarding outdoor activities to make our lives much more positive. Furthermore, we should also enrich our knowledge regularly by reading and studying.
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besides
watching TV can
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help
us entertain and relax after a tiring day of studying or working, we can be
adversely
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affected
if we
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watch
TV
constantly
,
especially
children. They will not
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only
become more and more
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sendentary
, less effective at learning,
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but
their feelings will
also
be
negatively
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affected
to the outside world.
Instead
of spending time sitting in front of the screens, we should
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take part
in more rewarding outdoor activities to
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make
our
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lives
much more
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positive
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Furthermore
, we should
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enrich our knowledge
regularly
by reading and studying.

IELTS essay Television has had a tremendous influence on its viewers

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  American English
1 paragraphs
95 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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