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Paragraph 1 The busy schedules that most adults almost face from day to day have created a rising health problem in the modern world

Paragraph 1 The busy schedules that most adults almost face from day to day have created a rising health problem in the modern world 5LO6D
In conclusion, stress that we face is not too strange in this modern life, as well as those bad influences when under pressure. Although it causes bad effects on both our mental and physical strength, we can control it. We should arrange schedules in a specific way and prioritize the important tasks first. Enjoying hobbies or exercising regularly is a good way to releive pressure. Moreover, we should spend more time with family and friends to maintain a good relationship.
In conclusion
,
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stress
that we face is not too strange in this modern life,
as well
as those
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bad
influences when under pressure. Although it causes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
effects on both our mental and physical strength, we can control it. We should arrange schedules
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in a specific way
and prioritize the
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important
tasks
first
. Enjoying hobbies or exercising
regularly
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
way to
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releive
pressure.
Moreover
, we should spend more time with family and friends to maintain a
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good
relationship.
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IELTS essay Paragraph 1 The busy schedules that most adults almost face from day to day have created a rising health problem in the modern world

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80 words
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