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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion elMJ
The invention of television is undoubtedly one of humankind's greatest inventions. It is a way of communication among people of one country and different countries and nations. People watch TV to find out about the latest news, weather, sports, etc. It is a great way to learn new and extend one's range of interests. Scientists say that children spend the same amount of hours in front of TV as they do in school. I think that this can be said about many grown people too. Also, television is a great means of eliminating stress and tension. One can relax and leave one's troubles behind lying on one's favorite sofa and watching a comedy. However, some people believe that television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Personally, I do not agree with this statement. A couple centuries ago people spent their time gambling, reading, gossiping or playing chess. I do not think that television is a cause of destroyed communication among family members and friends. First of all, if members of a family have common interests and they want to make each other happy they will always find many ways to spend their time together and be close. Otherwise, if people avoid each other and they do not have anything to share with each other they will find television a great way to escape from this miserable existence. I believe that many people chose family and their friends over some soap operas or a movie. Second of all, I think that television can be a great resource of subjects to discuss. Many people watch different educational programs to find out more about their environment, nature, wild life animals, economic situations, etc. So, when they gather with their friends they discuss important issues and arque with each other in looking for the truth. My husband and I often watch the news channel to keep abreast of the latest news. After that we always discuss some issues we concerned about. Also, we like to watch a TV show "the funniest animals". We like this program because it makes us laugh. I can not imagine how these programs can prevent our communication and be harmful to our relations. To summarize, I would like to add that if people want to communicate with each other they will find a way to do it. Otherwise, if television were not existent, people would find other escapes and reasons not to be with each other such as drugs, gambling, etc
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one of humankind's greatest inventions. It is a way of
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communication
among
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people
of one country and
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different
countries and nations.
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People
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watch
TV to
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find
out about the latest
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news
, weather, sports, etc. It is a
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great
way to learn
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new
and extend one's range of interests. Scientists say that children spend the same amount of hours in front of TV as they do in school. I
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think
that this can
be said
about
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many
grown
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people
too.
Also
,
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television
is a
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great
means of eliminating
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stress
and tension. One can relax and
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leave
one's troubles behind lying on one's favorite sofa and watching a comedy.
However
,
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some
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people
believe that
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television
has
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destroyed
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communication
among
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, I do not
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with this statement. A couple centuries ago
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people
spent their time gambling, reading, gossiping or playing chess. I do not
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think
that
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television
is a cause of
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destroyed
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communication
among family members and
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friends
.
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First of all
, if members of a family have common
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interests and
they want to
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make
each
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other
happy they will always
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find
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many
ways to spend their time together and be close.
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, if
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people
avoid each
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other and
they do not have anything to share with each
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other
they will
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find
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television
a
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great
way to escape from this miserable existence. I believe that
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many
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people
chose family and their
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friends
over
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some
soap operas or a movie.

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television
can be a
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great
resource of subjects to discuss.
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people
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watch
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different
educational programs to
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find
out more about their environment, nature, wild life animals, economic situations, etc.
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So
, when they gather with their
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friends
they discuss
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important
issues and
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arque
with each
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other
in looking for the truth.

My husband and I
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often
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watch
the
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news
channel to
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keep
abreast of the latest
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news
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issues we concerned about.
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the funniest animals
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. We like this program
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us laugh. I can not imagine how these programs can
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our
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communication
and be harmful to our relations.

To summarize
, I would like to
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that if
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people
want to communicate with each
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they will
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find
a way to do it.
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television
were not existent,
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people
would
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find
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other
escapes and reasons not to be with each
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such as drugs, gambling, etc
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IELTS essay Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
412 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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