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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion Mj1a
Using television has exterminated interaction between friends and family. In this essay, I will share my ideas about why I disagree with this statement. Firstly, I will explore that watching television can build a relationship with a lot of friends. Secondly, I will discuss that television can make a family more talking. First of all, television is a tool for amusement making. It can be said that no one in the world has never watched television before. Nowadays, there are many channels on TV that can gather people and create socialization. For example, the FIFA world cup festival, the biggest football matches in the world, has live broadcasted soccer matches among many countries to win the world cup trophy, which can build the interaction between friends for cheering their love country and team together. Furthermore, in many countries, a lot of interesting TV channels have set for their people, including a kid’s channel, movie channel etc. These channels can help and improve communication in the family because there can be filling the gap between the aged. For example, when you and your family have seen the same series movie, you can discuss and exchange about the content. Moreover, some channel like the education channel - Discovery kid’s show which can help children learning science along with their parent and do some existing experiments at their home on holiday. In conclusion, we can see clearly that television has not eradicated communication among friends and family. In my view, TV can build communication more than destroy.
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has exterminated interaction between
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friends
and
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family
. In this essay, I will share my
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ideas
about why I disagree with this statement.
Firstly
, I will explore that watching
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television
can build a relationship with
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a lot of
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friends
.
Secondly
, I will discuss that
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television
can
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make
a
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family
more talking.

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First of all
,
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television
is a tool for amusement making. It can
be said
that no one in the
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world
has never
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watched
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television
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before
. Nowadays, there are
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many
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channels
on TV that can gather
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people
and create socialization.
For example
, the FIFA
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world
cup festival, the biggest football matches in the
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world
, has
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live
broadcasted soccer matches among
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many
countries to win the
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world
cup trophy, which can build the interaction between
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friends
for cheering their
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love
country and team together.

Furthermore
, in
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many
countries,
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a lot of
interesting TV
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channels
have set for their
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people
, including a kid’s
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channel
, movie
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etc. These
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channels
can
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help
and
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improve
communication in the
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family
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because
there can be filling the gap between the aged.
For example
, when you and your
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family
have
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seen
the same series movie, you can discuss and exchange about the content.
Moreover
,
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some
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channel
like the education
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channel
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-
Discovery kid’s
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show
which can
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help
children learning science along with their parent and do
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some
existing experiments at their home on holiday.

In conclusion
, we can
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see
clearly
that
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television
has not eradicated communication among
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friends
and
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family
. In my view, TV can build communication more than
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destroy
.
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IELTS essay Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
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