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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 254 words.

Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Bx96
In present time, lots of people have busy schedules whenever they get free from their work hours, they watch different T. V channels. In order to this, people become lazy and prefer to avoid contact with the relatives and the friends. I agree with the above statement. There are many reasons why people are attracted towards the TV such as they have many facilities to repeat telecast of serial, save option for live telecast and so on. Thus, whenever people want to relax, they utilise this time for television. Later on they feel idle to communicate with relatives and friends. For example, after watching one hour of episode, people get tired and choose to avoid contact with them. They postpond their meetings with friends and relatives. One more reason is that, people want to enhance their knowledge by watching the News channel or any other Animal planet channel instead of talking with the relatives and the friends. So, people get exhausted by watching many Tv channels. Television take their all free time rather than spending with the others. Nowadays, children are more attracted to the television than adults. It affects their socialising skills. For instance, children avoid playing with their friends, they stick in front of Tv all the time. By that children become lazy, they avoid meeting with family members and friends. Children need to be active to participants and need to increase thier communication skill with the friends and the relatives. In conclusion, people should keep relation with their friends and the family member who help them in emergency instead of giving all free time to the television. Television is one type of idiot box which makes person inactive and attched with it. I suggest people should keep fix time for television in home.
In present
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time
, lots of
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people
have busy schedules whenever they
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get
free from their work hours, they
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watch
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different
T. V
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channels
. In order to this,
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people
become lazy and prefer to
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avoid
contact with the relatives and the
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friends
. I
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agree
with the above statement.

There are
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many
reasons why
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people
are attracted
towards the TV such as they have
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many
facilities to repeat telecast of serial, save option for
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live
telecast and
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so
on.
Thus
, whenever
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people
want to relax, they
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utilise
this
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time
for
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television
. Later on they feel idle to communicate with relatives and
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friends
.
For example
, after watching one hour of episode,
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people
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get
tired and choose to
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avoid
contact with them. They
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postpond
their meetings with
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friends
and relatives.

One more reason is that,
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people
want to enhance their knowledge by watching the News
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channel
or any other Animal planet
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channel
instead
of talking with the relatives and the
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friends
.
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So
,
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people
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get
exhausted by watching
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many
Possible spelling mistake found.
Tv
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channels
.
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Television
take their all free
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time
rather
than spending with the others. Nowadays,
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children
are more attracted to the
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television
than adults. It affects their
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socialising
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skills
.
For instance
,
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children
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avoid
playing with their
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friends
, they stick in front of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Tv
all the
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time
. By that
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children
become lazy, they
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avoid
meeting with family members and
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friends
.
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Children
need to be active to participants and need to increase
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thier
communication
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skill
with the
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friends
and the relatives.

In conclusion
,
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people
should
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keep
relation with their
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friends
and the family member who
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help
them in emergency
instead
of giving all free
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time
to the
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television
.
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Television
is one type of idiot box which
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makes
person inactive and
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attched
with it. I suggest
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people
should
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keep
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
in home.
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IELTS essay Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
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