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teenagers should be employeed in an unpaid community work in their leisure time.

teenagers should be employeed in an unpaid community work in their leisure time. nEJPe
It is often said that the teenagers should be employeed in an unpaid community work in their leisure time. In my opinion, I agree to this notion of the statement and the important illustrations are stated below. Most of the teenagers are quite energetic as they are in the early stages of life. Usually, most of the teenagers are more inclined to the unethical standards of life. To illustrate, the young generation are accompanied with friends that can lead them to a successful or unsuccessful person. It is extremely important for the society to be able to mould teenagers with proper ethics and moral values. Moreover, the community work will also make them ready for the real world. The unpaid work makes the teenagers brings a broader perspective of the work. Consequently, they learn about the work standards and also will be helpful for the community. The teenagers can do the work in leisure time. Moreover, this can improve the level of thinking and especially the importance of hardwork. To conclude, it is beneficial for the community and the teenagers to work eventhough it is unpaid as it can improve the moral values of the teenagers.
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said that the
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should be
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employeed
in an unpaid
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in their leisure time. In my opinion, I
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agree
to this notion of the statement and the
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important
illustrations
are stated
below.

Most of the
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teenagers
are quite energetic as they are in the early stages of life.
Usually
, most of the
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teenagers
are more inclined to the unethical standards of life. To illustrate, the young generation are
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accompanied with
friends that can lead them to a successful or unsuccessful person. It is
extremely
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important
for the society to be able to
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mould
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teenagers
with proper ethics and moral values.
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, the
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community
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will
also
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make
them ready for the real world.

The unpaid
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work
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makes
the
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teenagers
brings a broader perspective of the
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work
.
Consequently
, they learn about the
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work
standards and
also
will be helpful for the
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community
. The
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teenagers
can do the
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work
in leisure time.
Moreover
, this can
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improve
the level of thinking and
especially
the importance of
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hardwork
.

To conclude
, it is beneficial for the
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community
and the
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teenagers
to
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work
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eventhough
it is unpaid as it can
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improve
the moral values of the
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.
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IELTS essay teenagers should be employeed in an unpaid community work in their leisure time.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
196 words
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